A glossy atmosphere rises above a celestial dreamscape
where eye's become hollow with rest.
I toss and turn as angels conduct melodic lullabies which
hypnotize a persistent insomnia; reality fading to fantasy.
An icy chill entombs my soul and crystallizes chromatic veins
which pulse to the whispers of a gentle breeze.
Stars harmonize and dance upon a sheet of frigid glass
painted by a magical euphoria of glimmering diamonds.
I stand in the midst of a shattered dimension,
mountains shielding my soul from immoral corruption—
Icy, gem-topped caps breathe protection
into my wintery spirit
from an illusionary terrestrial sphere
||Opening their snowy arms to freeze me in sleep||
Hallucination covets this frozen tundra in a glowing embrace,
a misty velvet brushing the frail hybridized lights of the moon.
The illumination prances over glistening sapphire water,
rippling amongst melodies of fantasia swirls and polar rocks.
Darkened clouds eclipse the fluorescent haze and cast shadows
on this tranquil paradise……
pain and fear absent in a world of hushed serentiy……
….forever lost in lunacy….
Author notes
Once again, the picture came from here:
http://i113.photobucket.com/albums/n225/rottweiler132000/Crystal_Fantasy_2_by_Galanen.jpg
4)Write about what makes you happy:
(submersing myself in an almost 'fantasy type escape' helps me when things are really rough and hard to bare. That and going out with friends.....but i try to create a mystical atmosphere with words and put myself at that specific place and in that dimension). Once again, i hope you're doing ok
A contest entry
- Fly Away With Me! by whispernthedark.
795 points, ended January 19, 2008, 13 entries
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Honorable mention
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780 points, ended January 22, 2008, 29 entries
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Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Outstanding!!!
Strong narrative with rich vocab that made the reader feel they'd miss something if they looked away from the screen...
Another fantastic piece...
Well done!!!
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Wow! BRILLIANT!!! I loved the imagery created with the perfect terminology within the context. This was pure excellence and I'm surprised too that you didnt base this on murder lol. The fantasy incorporated is amazing, you composed this soooo well 'An icy chill entombs my soul and crystallizes chromatic veins
which pulse to the whispers of a gentle breeze' - a great line that captured me and left me entranced. I LOVED THIS COMPOSITION!!!
~Emily~ xx
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This is absolutly amazing. I read it 3 times and Im literally in awe of your wording and imagery. This is fantastic...in one of your responses to a comment here you have "I am FAR from talented" (silly girl!) and you are right...WAY PAST talented. You blow talented away with this.
Stellar writing.
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LMAO,
well, thanks much for your compliments! Haha
but i'm seriouslyyy not talented, lol.
i'm emotional
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Great write!!!!!!! Full of imagination!!!!! Somewhat dark, but like some dark poems..... They can tease the mine and for a moment allow you to forget any problems therein!!!! Thanks for sharing this with us!!!!
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AWWWW!!!!!!! THANKS SO MUCH!!!
haha, for a dark poem, it's very abnormal for me
Most of my poetry is dark (in the sense of murder). This was the complete opposite and was written during a rough time. THANKS SO MUCH FOR YOUR COMMENT!!!!!!!
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This poem had such amazing discription...I closed my eyes for a moment and saw every detail. Thank you so much for your amazing entry.
~Jessi~
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thanks so much for your comment! I'm glad you liked it! ^_^
It proves for a great escape from reality! ^_^
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Well done!
I really loved the direction you went with the picture! These are my favorite lines, I enjoyed the wording and the image conjured:
I toss and turn as angels conduct melodic lullabies which
hypnotize a persistent insomnia; reality fading to fantasy.
Wonderful write (this deserved more than an honorable!) Keep your pen to the paper.
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AWWWW!!!!!! THANKS SO MUCH!
I'm not a very good poetic but i LOVE LOVE LOVE creating imagery!!! ^_^
Especially like this.....
the picture was so beautiful i just HAD to write something about it
thanks again for your comment
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no blood? Gore? Horror? Suspense? Is it you?? A beautiful piece, so descriptive and creative. Certainly different from your normal poems but no less amazing. Fabtastic!!
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Wow. You certainly captures the essence of that picture. But No guts? Blood? Creeping men? Huh? lol, definately shows your universal talent. Beautiful write. Interesting words for description. All of which painted a picture in my mind quite similar to the one in your author notes. Once again you have impressed me! Good write!
Oh and I LOVED this line.
pain and fear absent in a world of hushed serentiy……
Certainly is a beautiful way to tie everything up. Me Gusta. -
I loved the verbiage here and the beautiful imagery u displayed.It was a smooth and well flowing write.Very well done!Thanks for entering
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Thanks!!! This was a very fun write for me acutally. A TOUGH one......but FUN!
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I love the picture that inspired this writing. Thank you so much for sharing and entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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surprising......eh??
No violence.....
no hatred......
no gore......
no serial killers.....
PURE PEACE AND HAPPINESS!!!!!
haha, didn't think i had it in me, did ya??
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au contraire. You posted another poem somewhat like this a while back [it was really good by the way ... I may have even bookmarked it] and yeah. I remembered it as soon as I started reading this one.
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haha......i don't even remember which one anymore. Did it have something to do with wolves?? ACTUALLY.....NO IT DIDN'T! I KNOW what one you're tlaking about.
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haha iiiiiiiiiii think so XD
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YES...!!
I must hand it to you Synth. You do command an excellent vocabulary of English. You have always managed to expressed your words and visions, in every poem and story. Again the images you portrayed in this write are great.
Good luck in the contest,
All the best,
~T.S~
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OMG......THIS ONE DROVE ME ABSOLUTELY CRAZY! It's great, everytime i'd go to write it, something would happen and distract me from the task.....so i never finished.
Finally, today, i scratched all i had and started all over again and concentrated till i completed it. haha, thanks much for your comment
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this is beautiful. ive never seen someone put words together so beautifully and abstractly. i wish i had this kind of talent
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Thanks sooooo much for the comment.
Meh.....i'm FAR from talented, i just look at a picture and describe it using words. It's fun!
^_^
AND YOU HAVE A LOT OF TALENT! You're recent poem is very well written.....and full of such strong emotion. you have a talent for writing poems that others can relate to
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