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-hit-
i bruise easily
-hurt inside and out-
4.5.6
-marked-
a scar to prove my pain.
-everyone see's it.everyone knows-
8.9.10
- healed-
ready to be hit again
-a last chance of happiness-
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Author notes
its under a lot of construction. so advise is appreciated.
but please don't be mean about it.
if like it. say
if you don't.say.nicely
advise
Comments
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This is awesome... it describes wat most ppl have to go through. hurt...scar...heal. It's short & to the point.
Great write! :]
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wow... this is really good. so much meaning. get abused, hurt, heal, get abused....
well thought through... =]
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I really like this, I like the form of it, the way it's written. It works. I like the pattern type thing, because abuse is a pattern, a circle it's hard to escape from. good job
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this is cool,a different style.i dont think you need any advice its good just the way it is.i like it
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I actually like this the way it is. It captures the feelings you're trying to put into it, and it captures them well, in my opinion. Great write. :]
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wait i didnt actually say what i like about this poem . . . . . . i love it it's really thoughtful and i love the short little verses. Well done!!!!!!!
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Yay another poem from my favourite Pink Tails
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