So simple in the way it starts.
So simple, and yet you hold my heart.
So tender you are, with flesh so pale.
To delight my senses you never fail.
So many tell me how you're so bad for me.
I wonder just how it is they fail to see
Your golden luster, how you shine so bright.
I hunger for you both day and night.
I won't give you up no matter what they say
I'll hold fast and never stray.
You will always be the apple of my eye,
My golden, salty, crunchy french fry.
Author notes
french fries ----- option #8
A contest entry
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Comments
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French fries are pretty good, I have too admit. This was pretty funny! I laughed. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.
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LOL Would that be a McDonald's fry???
I know hoe ya feel, I love them too!! Thanks for your entry. I loved this.
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frenchfries! omg love french fries. my favorite is arby's curly fry. Mcdonalds is alright if you want a soggy one, then burger king's is crunchy lol.
and man you have won a lot of contests with this poem
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LOL. I just love the twist to this winning poem. Great imagery. Good luck in the contest.
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I'm not sure if you really love fries or it's a metaphore but really nice poem.
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i love the love in this. (i know that sounds corny) its really good. good luck
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lmao. you know...this is how i feel about mcD's fries all the time. i hear them call to me night and day!!! this was great. a good piece of work for the funny bone.
thanks!!!
*rianna
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you
YOU KNOW WHAT THIS POEM DID BLOW ME OFF THE SPOT. I LOVED IT GOOD JOB
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ha ha, I like it, I thought it was going to be another love poem . . . but in a way it is
great write
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Fantastic.
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Lol, awesome last line!
Really good, I liked this piece, very clever!
Excellent rhyming I just need you to put the options number in the authors notes, I think I know what option it is but it is in the rules so...
Thank you for your entry it was very good!
Good Luck!
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Haha, YES! What a perfect entry! Very creative and very cute!! Thank you and good luck!!
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This describes a certain someone so well! I know exactly how this feels. This is passionate! I love the repeat of so followed by a word to explain your emotion in the first stanza; it really adds effect.
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thanks for the comment on my poem i love my golden love the last line is so funn
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So funny! Thought I was reading a romantic poem all the way till the end, then bam! I was cracking up! I think they put something in those fries that make us all "fall in love" with them...hmmmm, lol. Great job
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Wonderful
Very clever and well expressed. Congratulations on your trophies. They were well deserved.
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lol i loved it great job and thank you sooo much for entering my contest XD
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LOL... the odd french fry can't be bad right??
Cute poem... thanks for entering! -
omg this is the SECOND poem that includes luv and food!! when does the torture END?!?
anywho, i like this poem becuz its simple and sweet. and includes food. but thats another story.
KUDOS!!! thanx for entering -
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Awwww
That is excellent
So jolly and full of hope
Very sweet
Thankyou for entering my contest
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Goodluck
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I had to laugh at this one. It sure caught me by surprise!
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This was a funny poem, but it still counts as a love poem, so I'm afraid I'll have to remove your poem. Sorry. It was funny though.
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It's your contest, of course, but I don't really see how this counts as a love poem since the object of my devotion is a french fry! LOL
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oops, I forgot the applause!
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that's so beautiful! thanks so much for entering this touching piece of poetry in my contest. best of luck
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'You will always be the apple of my eye,
My golden, salty, crunchy french fry.'
Love the slight humour, very beautiful and simple. Nicely penned.
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Haha, I was thinking you were talking about a man/woman at first and I was actually going to give you advice and tell you to stay away from him/her but the ending was a shocker. I loved it, it humored me! Thank you for the endtry and best of luck!
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Pee Ess...the choice of background really set the bait in the trap...Excellent!!
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Bleedin' Hilarious!!!
I just knew this would have a cracker of a punchline and IT DID!!!
I absolutely Loved the meter and rhyme
Well Wishes all round fine poet
Linda
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