Barefoot and fancy free with a touch of mud
upon the cheek, you wandered
back across the creek. The bucket of berries
half eaten on the way home. The birds, still
cheering the laughter that danced
out of your heart. Tales of gypsy queens
magicians lurking behind each tree,you told
me all the trials and travails you
suffered for a few fresh berries dressed in dew.
Only half a pail you cried, “I got
least a half of pail because I drove
a hard bargain with the elves who rescued me.”
I could only laugh and wipe the tears from my eyes.
Gave you a hug and emptied
the berries into the batter. Waffles, belgian style
berries and love covered in maple syrup to smooth
the path to the tum. Your face lit by the sun
as it created halos through the window pane.
Spring is dancing through the last of winter.
The creek along the meadow is laughing
across rocks and branches as it fills with melting
snow. The sun has found its heat again, I am
captured by the dance of smiles that you surround
me with. My daughter is full of magic
I am warm with how she shares her gifts.
12:07 PM
01/18/07
Alexandria, VA
For Ashley
Author notes
I couldn't find a contest for this, but I wanted to post it anyway. Somethings are made to be shared and this started as a response to a poem and grew into its own piece.
In a list
Please tell me what you think, what it makes you feel, how you are moved.
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I so love to hear your words when you write for your children, they are like miniature fairytales written for them alone, and when they are grown as sadly five of my ten youngsters are you will be able to look upon them, and recreate those magical moments. The imagry in this is superb, infact, I can almost smell those waffles and hear your daughters laughter. Thankyou so much for sharing these precious memories with us love littlefishone (Theresa)
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I only have one child. He is thirteen. I have many AP daughters, this was written for one. I love children, in my own way. I am the oldest of six.
This was written with magic in mind. For I love magic, the real kind. There are moments, locked in everyone's heart, when someone has touched it and stolen a part. This is one of those special ones. Thank you for letting a little of the magic in.
Love, Tom B.
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Wonderful poem and emotions!
WOW -- another super write, Tom! You do these so well! The presentation of your love and feelings in poetry is just fantastic! Your metaphors and the total imagery of this poem is great! I do like your style and cannot believe your talents -- they are overwhelming!
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Micol enjoyed it. You love it. Many others did as well. I am touched by this. How good or great I am? I am not sure. I have my own standards I reach for and they are always it seems hard to reach. I need to try to send these out to magazine to see what will publish. I think, I still have a long way to go.
Peace & Light,
Tom B.
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I LOVED THIS! It says spring from beginning to end! You did wonderful on this work Tom!
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I LOVED THIS! It says spring from beginning to end! You did wonderful on this work Tom!
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Thanks, this was written to delight a child's heart and a woman's soul.
Peace, Tom B.
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Tom,
my dear friend this was so sweet and beautiful like the soul of a wonderful father...I so understand this poem.
Thanks so much for sending me the link.
Daughters are the most treasure a father has..
They are Jewels in your crown.
This touched me and i know you knew it would.
your friend
Teachers pet
~Lisa~
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This was written in response to one of my AP daughters comments. Our love as a parent for the wonder of a child is almost impossible to describe. This is just one of my feeble attempts.
Love, Tom B.
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I Do love berries for breakfast!
This poem makes me smile, as much as the content herein, but also it draws forth memories of my own with my daughters. I love the imagery of the sun glinting through the window and creating halos... Love it! On another note, I am sorry I haven't gotten around to commenting in the other link you sent me awhile back.. but I did bookmark it! I will get to that soon This is a wonderfully angelic but earthy and simpleton type piece. This is true poetry to me
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yeah I thought it would remind you of your daughters. I just thought this would bring sunshine to your heart. Magic comes in many forms and this is better than a house full of faires or a parcel of pixies. Thanks for sharing your joy. Love, Tom B.
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To me... this poem is more than a dedication... or a tribute. It is a beauty when someone can surround you with such joys. and just as beautiful when you so effortlessly see such tenderness in all that moves around you... then pen out these moving and moment stealing pieces!!
love it!!
Mel
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It is obvious you have been bewitched by your daughters. The magic of imagination and the joy in letting the wonder in the world nuzzle against you makes things like this show up in my life.
Love, Tom B.
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I think you have many daughters on thi site who would just smile at this. Love, C
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Only because I am a very fortunate man.
Love, Tom B.
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I love this one!!!
Oh, Tom, this should be in a contest. It's just magical and reminds me of something I wrote a long time ago about waffles and sunshine. The imagery is full of music and love and that tender essence we can never quite capture in speech. We need these moments in our lives. -
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Perhaps one that takes Pre writes. I had to post it before I could find a contest to slip it into.
Thanks for delighting in my simple imagery and familial love. You might say this is for the daughter my wife and I can never have. Love, Tom B.
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Only someone who is caring and loving is able to write this way. This is such a sincere poem. Such a lovely theme - simple pleasures are the best and you depicted it well. I adore the "berries and love" line.
Marvelous work!
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everyday in everyway there are wonders to behold if we are willing to let the world show them to us the way they would be shown and if we are willing to stop listening to our mind saying its my way or I will turn blue. Thanks for sharing your joy with my simple verse.
Love, Tom B.
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Wow ~
From the very beginning, you had me ~
You may not be a From King, but you certainly have talents which turn us green my Friend :)
I adore this FV write.....you have shown us a part of your inner boy, watching your future grow into the size of a young girl......lovely Tomis ~
The Imagery is stunning, and your Tone is sewn throughout this write perfectly ~
*Lurking behind each tree, (space) ~
Other than that, a flawless write which should have waitied for the POW contest to open n about an hour ...... hehe ~
Be well and be blessed brother,
Bear ~
....and the one thing I noticed about this write, is that you did not need to utilize a single metaphore to create magic!
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Perhaps the delight exposed by the expressions of fancy and joy with the imagination allowed to run free, creates for the reader all the magic they need. Thanks for enjoying this and shareing your pleasure. I am only beginning to see that the writes I thought were to simple and plain may have been more beautiful than I thought.
Love, Tom B.
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Touched by magic this lovely vision danced it's way into my heart... And made me crave Belgiun waffles with berries and lots of love...
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I have only fathered a son. there will be no more than that, but thanks to AP I have several wonderful daughters and consider myself blessed.
Love, Tom B.
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Beautiful. On the surface a straightforward, almost simple-seeming bit of experience. At the same time, it develops language and image into poetry, with just a touch of rhyme--internal and terminal--to create music, to hold the lines together in an organic unit, to subtlely remind us that this is a deft performance in words.
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For this, I have you to thank. I always, before, saw these rights and went they're are to simple and plain to be art. I guess my own insecurities demanded grandeur. Your making me, through your critiques, makeing more aware of how my structures hold the vision and create the poem gave me room to see anew what I create. Thank you.
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Grandeur reqires one kind of art; simplicity, another. Both can elicit great poetry. Personally, I've found your recent things highly approachable, richly detailed and artistic, and thoroughly enjoyable. For this audience, at least, you are creating memorable poetry.
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Thank you.
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