What do you think?
Should I go or not?
Don’t stand there and just blink
I hope you rot!
I can’t find my shoe
and where is my file?
Don’t stand there and turn blue
You are vile!
The floor is so cold
How ‘bout some heat?
Don’t stand there and grow mold
You are dead meat!
Why are you smirking?
What is wrong with my hair?
Don’t stand there lurking
You are useless, I swear!
I got to get a going
before I find I’m late
Don’t stand there crowing
You are my date!
A contest entry
- Picture perfect by Alexis Manley.
380 points, ended January 20, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is alright
It has good rhyme and it opens up the thoughts we often have about men or dates that they often never hear .
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I am not sure how to rate this one. It gives off the impression that someone is angry all the time about simple things.... grouching about wanting her things. Good write. Thank you for entering my contest.
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You ask for in your contest
"this is picture inspired write something about what you see, what thoughts pop into your head... do what ever anything, give me whatever youve got."
So not knowing that you were going to take it personally, I wrote about a girl that was nervous of the occasion and blowing off some steam as her date stood there laughing at her in a knowing and loving way. I am sorry for the impression this may have left you. I do appreciate the inspiration of the photo, I really liked it. -
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as long as it in spired you to write, that is what counts. keep on penning.
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