I'm in the polished hallways at my school
I'm skipping, laughing, looking like a fool
I couldn't care about what they think
Because I'm floating as I watch them sink
The students whisper and the teachers glare
Today, I don't notice and I don't care
I'm thinking about your lovely skyful eyes
Reminding me of long-lost lullabies
My old creaky swing set
Playing marbles for bets
I look in your eyes and I get lost for a while
Climbing up the old tree
Falling and scraping my knees
I'll mature later. Right now, I'm a child
My father wants to know if I am well
But he doesn't ask. I think he can tell
Judging from the way I dance around
There is a greater love that I have found
I drag my feet and hum without a tune
You don't even know this is because of you
So I thought I'd write this little song
About you and this high you put me on
Staring down at the dirt
Finding ways to get hurt
Give me a grin; we'll do what society forbids
There's no point to be young
If you don't have any fun
Let's grow up together and start as kids
Author notes
It's kind of self-explanatory.
option 3
this is here because the bookworm told me so
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Is the flow too off to read?
Comments
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This is very sweet. I love how throughout the whole poem you seem to be dancing, and it's because you are in love & you just don't care who thinks what of it.
Thanks for entering your write in "Enter All Your Love Writes Here!", and good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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I just recently learned that love is nothing to be ashamed of. This poem was in celebration of it. I'm glad you liked it.
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I'm pretty sure "skyful" isn't a word. Perhaps... "sky-filled" could replace it?
Interesting piece. Not sure I'm too fond of the ending. It seems to turn a little "bad" whereas the rest has the feeling of innocent young love. -
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'skyful' is sort of an inside thing. I chose it for a reason.
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wow!
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Articulately said . . .
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It sure is a cheery little poem, excellent rhyming.
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No problem
It's just about the most bubbly poem I've written. I'm not to good at the positive ones, so I'm glad at least the writing wasn't off.
Oh, and nice profile pic.
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Cute and sweet poem. I like the 'seize the day' and taking advantage of your youth attitude. Thank you for entering
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Anytime
I thought it was appropriate because, while it's a whimsical thing, it's not about them and how she can't live with/out him; it's about her. All about her, and what his love has done to her.
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wow this is flowing pretty well honestly...wow this makes me think back to old days...honestly whoever this is wrote for is really lucky. Great job!
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^.^ Glad you like it
It's for my best friend. I wanted to inpsire nostalgia, so your comment really makes my day. Thank you!
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man, this is honestly something good, i like this. i can't think of what to say but keep it flowing, my friend, keep it flowing
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Your applause says it all
I know your comments are particular, so I know you really enjoyed this. I'm doing my best.
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