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A Night Not So Long Ago

On a cold dreary night not so long ago,
I found someone to whom I cannot say no.
Tall dark how mysterious and oh so handsome were you
My knees buckled every time you dared take a look at me too

Your skin was white like porcelain, your eyes a piercing blue
Your nails were like diamonds, your teeth white and sharp I knew
Your touch on my skin like velvet, your voice dripped honey
Your breath was sweet and cool on my skin – oh so cunning

How your arms enclosed around me and your lips touched my neck
My back arched, my head tilted, I felt such a nervous wreck
As your fangs pierced my neck, I swooned, and felt myself begin to fall
You pulled me closer, holding me tight, holding me up against the wall

I knew not what it was you would really do to me and I didn’t really care
All I knew was there was no place I’d rather be right then than right there
That velvet touch brushing my hair aside as you gently suckled my blood
Those whispered words in my mind calming me saying, “It’s ok, love”

Finally as you slowly pull away I feel myself on the brink of death
My vision blurs, my head is dizzy, and slow are my heart and breath
Your diamond nail cuts your own throat and you nuzzle me in to you
Instinctively I drink the essence that flows from you to me now through

And as I do I feel myself become more and more alive with each minute
I become more aware of you there with me and the world with you in it.
I feel on fire with an unquenchable thirst that demands to be satisfied
To you I feel a sense of undying devotion and unendingly gratified

You loved me, you loved me to death
You loved me so much, with each breath
You took my life,
You made me your wife

Now as your dark bride,
I must cover and hide
Away from the sun
I’ll now forever run

That night not so long ago
I remember vividly so
The night you turned me to be like you
That night I really began to live true





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SchizoChic
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  • Abe 1
    October 2, 2008

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    na ya dont suck
    dark yup sure is as is de feelings
    ya did a grt poem ere
    gd luck and thanx 4 yr entry
    abe


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    September 29, 2008

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    Brilliantly creative poem
    Builds such a story
    Sensual dark
    Love the flow too
    Good luck to you
    Julie


  • alco
    January 26, 2008

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    Incredibly describtive, a poem perfectly penned. My favorite movie is Queen of the Damned, I basically like all vampire movies though.
    Congrats on winning Honorable Mention.
    Take care and be safe.
    ~Monica


  • RosalindRawr-rific
    January 19, 2008

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    Wow, this is wonderful, i wish you the best of luck in the contest, although with a poem like this you wont need it =)


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    January 18, 2008

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    Wow this is truly fantastic, I loved it, I'm freaking IN love with it! Great work totally perfect!

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