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Never Again

Roses of raven black
Lay amongst a graveyard
Of shattered mirrors.
My distorted reflection
Stared back at me angrily
Form the wreckage.
Bloody tears crept down
My milky white cheeks
And trickle into the rubble
Of my emotional outburst.
This is the last time.
My eyes will never again
Shed tears for you.
You are the only one
Who truly knows my heart,
And to use it against me this way
Sends tremors down my spine.
I loved you,
But you left me anyway.
You left me for
The “perfect” girl who
Everyone else knew was fake.
Yet,
On my birthday,
You still managed to send me
The blackest roses
That you could find.
You know they are my favorite.
Why would you do this?
Why would you
Toy with the emotions
Of the girl who would willingly
Bleed for you?
Never mind.
It does not matter.
I will never again
Long for your embrace
Or the tenderness
Of your sweet lips.
Tonight,
I long only for
The delicate kiss of the razor
As it dances across my wrist
And the darkness
That is to follow.
Good-bye my love,
You will never again
Haunt me in my dreams.

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  • melphleg gold member
    March 11, 2008

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    Certainly reads like an angry rant from a hurting heart. Nice imagery though maybe a bit disjointed. I liked the cracked mirror and the distorted reflection.

  • californiagirl
    March 11, 2008
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    The beginning of this had powerful imagery. The end hit very close to home. The black rose idea was a little cliche, but not overly so. This definitely made me take a shaky breath towards the end, when I got to the part about the delicate kiss of a razor. Thanks so much for your entry and good luck!


  • Charley-
    February 22, 2008

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    Hello there and thanks for entering my contest your piece is very creative and very well written. Best of luck to you and thanks again for entering.


  • xXsoulxcollectorXx
    February 21, 2008

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    The delicate kiss of the razor
    As it dances across my wrist


    loved those lines,thank you for entering the contest!!!


  • darkangelcutter
    February 20, 2008
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    oh i love this it has a "the crow" feeling to it well it did me esp when the black raven and the graveyard. your could have got that from that well i love it and plus its one of my favorite movies, anyway good job and i love this good luck with things
    blessings
    shannon


  • LanguishedLad
    February 20, 2008
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    WOW

    WOW is all i can really say, breath taking, thankyou so much for entering, I though that the ending might have been different whilst reading but I loved the way you ended it. Just 1 tiny little problem, the writing needed to be just a little brighter, besides that PERFECT.


  • N e a r
    January 28, 2008
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    I like how you describe you'll never have this person again, and that you are replacing him with something much more serious and dangerous, which would be the razor, etc. Deeply expressed and emotions are wild throughout the poem. Nicely done.

    Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck!

    Marluxia


  • Stormy Days
    January 25, 2008
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    chilling


  • NyteShade
    January 18, 2008

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    I liked all your lines except for the cutting bit, but each to there own i say. You can sense the pain behind this poem, i especially love these lines.

    You still managed to send me
    The blackest roses
    That you could find.

    Nicely written. well done.

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