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ancora

 

 


one more hour
of leaning into each other

and if you come 
closer,

so close
that you can blow
your voice into my mouth,

then these sounds shall be wind
that lifts my eyes from their dark places –

they blow away, they are wind,

the starry scarves of every goddess
of the air, a sunbird, soft with moon,
above the rooftops
of your lips 

to return,
like the blossoms and the birds
and the stars that have forgotten
branch and sky,

to the wetlands of your throat,
warm and open,

like a homecoming



 

 

 

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  • Emmyb gold member
    July 22

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    Juicy images and so much flavour and interesting full bodied words.

    to the wetlands of your throat, and

    that you can blow
    your voice into my mouth,

    were the two images that really worked well for me.

    A fantastic write. Glad I found it

    Emma


    • Nicolette gold member
      July 22
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      thank you, Emma - also for going back and reading some of the older poems


  • GypsyEyes
    July 3, 2008

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    this was very well penned! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox


  • apples fell
    May 23, 2008

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    Neruda comes to mind here. Probably intentional to some extent. The way the words tinker down the page almost like water is wondrous to behold. Certainly a delicate tapestry that can weave its way around the listener. Memory sharing moment: When I was eight, I think, my father told me that when I slept the skies stopped, the world became an enchanted place. Not just completely for me of course, but for everyone. Something about this makes time stop. Quite lovely.

    ;


    • Nicolette gold member
      May 24, 2008
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      I love Neruda's poetry and yes, he definately influences the way I write... if only I could write like him! Thank you once again, for a lovely comment


  • Swan song gold member
    April 5, 2008
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    Oh my you give me flutter bellie every time I read your poetry. This was wonderful congrats on the gold


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    March 28, 2008

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    Just gorgeous. Loved how you used the bloom/branch and the bird/sky to illustrate this beautiful abandon!

    Marvelous.

    • Nicolette gold member
      March 28, 2008
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      Thank you! Yes, it is a "beautiful abandon", isn't it?


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    February 25, 2008

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    Like a homecoming...
    Your lovers voice in your mouth, their words in your voice. Such tenderness in these lines. Enough to make rivers swell inside your eyes.

    Blessed be,
    Billie Jean

  • vertigo beat
    February 8, 2008
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    you're really very good.


  • Swan song gold member
    February 3, 2008

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    Wow This is really passionate! Congrats on the gold
    Well deserved no doubt. You are just plain good dear!


  • Heart Sutra
    February 3, 2008

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    you have such a way with words, love and feelings...

    so beautiful


  • Heath Thompson
    February 1, 2008

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    Nicolette, I realise people say oh-my-god a lot on this site but Oh My God! This is the first poem of yours that I have read and I want more. Very well done to you.

    • Nicolette gold member
      February 1, 2008
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      Oh, thank you....I'm honoured ...and that OMG sounds good to me . Welcome!!


  • Dienush
    January 31, 2008

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    Wow, Nicolette, after those first two lines, how could anyone help reading on and falling in love with this poem? I know the feeling you talk about. Like a closeness that makes two people feel like one. And yet you write of it so well and freshly, this poem is as good as the experience itself. I love this.

    ~Diana


    • Nicolette gold member
      February 1, 2008
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      Diana, thank you so much. I haven't been online for quite a while and so nice to find your comments this morning . I have some catching up to do...!


  • poetryality silver member
    January 25, 2008

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    Sensual, seductive, and stimulating! These words are not adequet but they give some idea of how swept away I am at your musing. I could feel these "winds". I have made them my own. ~Sigh

    Congratulations on earning the Gold in this challenge. Very worthy work to say the least.


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


  • Nishantshah2381
    January 25, 2008

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    very evocative.......................
    to return,
    like the blossoms and the birds
    and the stars that have forgotten
    branch and sky,


    thoughtful lines


  • just rob gold member
    January 24, 2008
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    Amazing

    congrats on a well deserved award.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    January 23, 2008

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    damn damn damn, this made me sigh..... I am on a catch up of reading and I'm so glad I came by this, this morning....

    especially as it's so wet and cold here and this definitely warms the cockles of my heart and makes me glad to know that love is beautiful

    nicely done Nicci and it is definitely gold...



    Gilly.

  • Suzanne Dia
    January 22, 2008

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    Wow, Nicci.

    This breathes love, you know?

    The imagery is gorgeous. It makes me think of what I wish my dreams to be.

    Beautiful work.




  • Danny Beatty gold member
    January 21, 2008

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    see, there you go again with your beautiful poetry! this poem is so smooth and understated at one level, the level of suggestion and of, well, of lips almost touching and perhaps whispering upon each other, just barely touching, (shiver ... sigh), and yet, on the other level, the ancora, which is always more than the first time, growing in awareness and unity with the first time ... this is just a totally sexy kiss, or gonna be, and so full of love ... peace ,,, Moqui


  • arafura gold member
    January 21, 2008
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    It's great to see you won gold for this! Richly deserved!


  • Leslie gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    beautiful written my friend, the part of so close, closer, remind me of the line, So close that your hand on my chest is mind...... from one of the Neruda Sonnets, but in a beautiful way to re-create it, perfect starry night in the beauty of a spring..

    Leslie


    • Nicolette gold member
      January 21, 2008
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      You know, I didn't even think of that sonnet by Neruda - and it's my favourite poem by him ... thanks, Leslie - and for reminding me about Neruda's poem again


  • Catressa gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    I am so stuck on the word Lips.. It seems such a simple word but to me lately IT BLOWS UP..

    Maybe cause I love Javiers.. lol Who knows but I love how you put
    "that you can blow
    your voice into my mouth"

    You clever Lady you.. That strikes such a mental pic..

    Sigh.. Poetry at it's best doll.


  • Utok Bulinaw
    January 20, 2008

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    Love the last three stanzas. Another breathtaking piece you have here Nic. R


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    January 20, 2008

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    Beautiful...Sighs...
    I adore the imagery of this write...
    Congrats on the gold...
    Peace and many blessings
    ~A~

  • wendymolly
    January 20, 2008
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    last three lines are as distinctly original as it can surely get!


    • Nicolette gold member
      January 20, 2008
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      Thank you - I'm glad to hear you liked those lines as someone thought it was cliche, lol

  • Shannon
    January 20, 2008

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    oooo "wetlands of you throat / warm and open"

    gorgeous! I wish I had thought of that! haha.

    You always have killer lines.


  • IronIcecream
    January 20, 2008

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    repetition & cliche
    used like this become originally powerful
    ever tried a poem containing only cliches and repetitive verbs?

    from silence to sighs
    it's all about breathe pauses and time
    sometimes


  • Whoochi gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    WOW! Gentle yet explosive...metaphor rocks in this poem....love the delicate ways and winds throughout...Congrats on Gold, well deserved!


  • Emerald13
    January 20, 2008

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    beautiful... the first two stanzas are amazing ... as are these

    to return,
    like the blossoms and the birds
    and the stars that have forgotten
    branch and sky,

    to the wetlands of your throat,
    warm and open,

    like a homecoming

    beautiful >>> Gina

  • grm
    January 19, 2008

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    ah, gold. and so deserved.

    prophetic, maybe?




  • Sandygram silver member
    January 19, 2008

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    Congratulations on winning the Gold. You have penned a beautiful poem for the quote. Well deserving of the Gold. Take care, Sandy


  • natari gold member
    January 19, 2008

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    Lovely Nic, and hey we have all been accused of cliche .I have a line in almost every poem which is cliche.You however are not.So this poem was really like a sigh.A beautiful thought out sigh.

    ~helen


    • Nicolette gold member
      January 19, 2008
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      Lolol.. thank you, Helen - now you make me feel so much better . Good to see you


  • Swan song gold member
    January 19, 2008
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    This was stunning sensual and a true gem to read.
    You are hitting on all cylinders dear that is for sure.

    • Nicolette gold member
      January 19, 2008
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      Thanks Jeff . I see you've been very busy on the poetic front lately


  • leander Moderators member
    January 19, 2008
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    I just had to come back at this one... and I see you got gold more than worthy if you ask me


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    January 19, 2008

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    to return,
    like the blossoms and the birds
    and the stars that have forgotten
    branch and sky,

    a material can be turned into the universal ..and universal can be turn into the poetry..this is all the bliss of this amazing work..well done...


  • tanzanite
    January 18, 2008

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    This was another masterpiece. I love the entire piece. You have the ability to write me into sighing, as I have said before. From the title to the very last well placed, well thought out word I was enchanted. This is brilliant.


  • misselaineous
    January 18, 2008
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    lovely


  • Kevin Moderators member
    January 18, 2008

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    'shall be wind' felt a bit too formal. great image of the wind lifting eyes. I also saw the hair lifting of course.

    sunbird soft with song - interesting alliterations, came out a bit listy and almost a bit cliche in the soft with song part.

    stars that have forgotten - AMAZING line! wetlands == awesome too

    like a homecoming felt almost cliche to me too. I'm being picky of course, and overall this was simply beautiful and very enjoyable


    • Nicolette gold member
      January 18, 2008
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      Thanks, Kevin... those lines that you mentioned that felt cliche, lol, I've rewritten them and then changed it again...I guess I would have to tweak this one some more!!

  • grm
    January 18, 2008
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    you have a way of making not just writing, but living and loving as well, seem so effortless and beautiful.

    this is a joy to read, and yes, is very much like a homecoming


  • Sonja
    January 18, 2008
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    I will do the same as Namita and I will ad a
    ~Sonja~

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    January 18, 2008

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    The poetess has, I note, placed this in a list entitled "sighs and silence" and how adequate that is for this joyous revelation of the silence of these words that speak to the soul and the silence of the screen that simply sighs. Incredibly touching and tender,no word felt superfluos nor was there another needed,the homecoming was complete and oh,you are the Homecoming Queen.Warm,wonderfully written and the reading felt akin to uncovering treasure.


  • Namita
    January 18, 2008
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    -


  • le soir
    January 18, 2008

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    "the starry scarves of every goddess
    of the air, a sunbird, soft with song,
    above the rooftops
    of your lips

    to return,
    like the blossoms and the birds
    and the stars that have forgotten
    branch and sky,

    to the wetlands of your throat,
    warm and open,

    like a homecoming"

    your words blew me away... what beautiful imagery here! this one is just beautiful... so very very amazing, this is. starry scurves of every goddess... sunbird soft with song above the rooftops of your lips ~ beautiful alliteration and consonance!

    what a poet your are! what a poet...


  • astralshepherd gold member
    January 18, 2008

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    So exotic, the feel and flow

    such a compelling poem mingled with brilliantly created soundings allows the mind to drift easily into each carefully crafted image. you had me at 'ancora' - but i was undone by your phrase "the starry scarves of every goddess" such a marvelous line, such a wondrous poem. When I read poems like this, my soul soars in delight – I’ve learned to stop asking why it does, why I am so moved. I am adjusting to joy of the journey.

    blessings and best wishes,


    ~r.


  • new light
    January 18, 2008

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    i absolutely love the imagery in this piece.

    "of the air, a sunbird, thick with song,
    above the rooftops
    of your lips"

    ^^BEAUTIFUL


  • tara wilson gold member
    January 18, 2008
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    this is so gorgeous..


  • PageTurner
    January 18, 2008

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    Your song echoes elegantly...

    "to return,
    like the blossoms and the birds
    and the stars that have forgotten
    branch and sky,"


    Penetrating Perception, Scribe.

    ~ Nicky♥

  • Rowan gold member
    January 18, 2008

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    I can't think of what to say... this was haunting. Touched me in a very deep place, and then deeper yet.
    Stunning.


  • Cat
    January 18, 2008
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    beautiful nic


    m


  • leander Moderators member
    January 18, 2008

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    For the love of all that's holy, I'm trying so hard not to yell a curse of wonderment (if that's is a word) with this masterpiece my friend!


  • Night Hope gold member
    January 18, 2008

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    "then these sounds shall be wind
    that lifts my eyes from their dark places –"

    I love this poem. I love this Poet. What a beauty this is, what a beauty you are. Absolutely gorgeous, my dear Friend. Thank you for the gift of your words to warm me, Sweetie. It's only 20 degrees right now (with a wind chill making it in the single digits), so I need all the sources of heat I can get. Good luck in the contest, my profound & lovely Sister of the Soul. Vlindertjie


  • NurseChilly gold member
    January 18, 2008
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    beak ready and stretched neck, deep in spasm of waiting..... for the food of love and life...

    if only to breathe through this sadness, this inhaled earthy tones and the embranched hearts...

    I know this homecoming and it aches like hell... but it's still home and where we are.... yes, i hear you my friend

    a touching write Nicci...





    Gill.x

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