I know I'm dying young,
That is why I wrote these songs,
That is why it's hard to say goodbye,
But my soul will stay around.
I know I'm dyin young,
That's why I had you strong,
And that I meant to do you wrong,
That way you won't miss me for long.
I know I'm dying young,
I know I'm dying alone,
I had been strong,
But I did myself wrong.
And i wrote this song
For all of you when I'm gone.
So,save thy tears,
And hide thy screams,
Face your fears,
I'm gone for long.
Thy will not fear,
Thy will not cry,
Thy will not scream,
Live by these
And thy soul will be at ease.
Author notes
Longing for death has become my daily obsession....
I embrace it and want to face it....
but my shadows wont let me have it...
i call upon thy mercy oh sweet long sleep
come and kiss my gentle lips...
turn that red into black
and my whiteness into grey...
freeze my blood but keep my brain....
shape me a ghost free of pain
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Brillaint , So much pain! It makes my blood boil ... Emotions are a beautiful thing! XXX
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Beautifully beautifully sad........ =(
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no not mentally ill its very beautifull has a good sense to it
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you are .. a bit ..
not because ur obsessed wid ur dying age, but wut do u care wut will happen after ur gone ..
i, myself, am dying young but i wanna be remembered .. work on that
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i like the author's note tho ..
me
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Beautiful YOU!
With such persona, word and brain you can never Die..
It's so weird how most yearn to death
As if it's a beautiful road of bliss
If so unique how death to some are found so beautifully
Forsaken the flesh after how thrown pitifully
It's YOU who are beautiful and unique
It's YOU who most and on the top I do SEEK...
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so not mentally ill
very talented though well done
well dont know if a smiley face is waranted after this poem but anyway
its very good and in some ways i hope you dont actually feel like this
but if you dont then you are very believable
either way congratulations
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WOW!
Chills down my spine!
I loved it a whole lot...
fantastic write especially
'And i wrote this song
For all of you when I'm gone.'
Great job. This rockedddd!
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woe.you sound depressed.that was both moving and chilling to read.It odd to read a poem that is so at ease talking about this subject.good write though
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no youre not mental
Sometimes I feel like this, but don't kill yourself though. Just because you "want to die" doesn't mean you necessarily will be happier when you do.
~Pandy -
really good....
flow seems alittle off but i wouldnt really care about that..
overall it a pretty good write....
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Sweetie? I think I need to share some words of insanity with you. I'd call them words of wisdom, but no sane person would ever think this so just bear with me here.
One, I'll talk about the write. I think it was beautiful, but needs a teeny bit more in it. There's not really a musical flow... it just feels like a pretty poem. So I suggest work on that a tiny bit, rhyme and beat count make a world of difference.
Second, my words of insanity. I know the feeling- death is such a beautiful object. It's like a prize to be sought out. The ultimate treasure. And I thought the exact same thing for a loooong time, for maybe the better of 6 years. However, something was holding me back. So me being the stubborn pain in the duck I am (I'm tired of bunny) decided that it was time to decide what that something was. And I have a feeling that all along it was my own stubborness refusing me what I apparently wanted the most- to explore the unknown, where so many have gone but none know about. I didn't want it to be unknown to me anymore. But more than that, I didn't want life to win that easily. Life sucks, life is hard and another pain in the duck, but I didn't want to go down without a fight either. If I go down, someone is coming along for the ride.
So maybe you should think about what your shadows are really telling you =)
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this is so sad.. heart-breaking.. the darkness in it is very dreary.. the repetition creates this sense of fatigue and despair..and the short lines imply a short breath..
so sad...
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