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we spit into heaven
always fall,
to lie like a desert
upon our tongues,
still waiting for holy water.
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A contest entry
- DFI Round 2 ~ Short and Sweet by And Hyetal.
800 points, ended February 5, 2008, 10 entries
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Be honest
Comments
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Now this is truly an interesting concept
of ones outlook on faith and their beliefs
or those of others.
Originiality lies upon this page.
Thank you for entering!
Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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Very nice.. short and sweet and to the point.
Thank you for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
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I really like the way you play with the senses in this short poem
It definately gives the reader some food for thoughts if you ask me
Thank you for this entry as well!
Leander -
i like this, really makes you think
good write well done
=)
i can't afford any applause so, woop woop woop =)
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short and sweet
shows life and faith for a better day to me. I like the simplicity of it, as we could say so much more but it wouldnt mean anything different. Faith and spirituality changes ones views. I am not religious but I am spiritual and believe there is a god. I just have a hard time with organized religion. I say to each is own though we all know in our hearts we have our own purpose in this life. I want to help teens become mature and prepared young adults that are more likely to be productive in society.
What do you do to help clear your mind?
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I write poetry
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Great poem
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Very good write. This one makes the reader think. Great title..your words create alot of thoughts as to the subject of faith..giving power to the title. Best wishes in the contest.
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Your last line packs quite a punch.
Oh boy. Very well done. Best of luck in this comp. ~Pamela
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OH truly a masterpiece and extgremely powerful in such short words....wowza.....this should have won, what a masterpiece in metaphor.....
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Imagery: 1 point
Theme: 1 point
Use of Form/Flow: 1 point
Other criteria: 1 point
Overall Appeal: 1 point
This was awesome! The theme was just beautiful... I don't know how you did it in the word limit I gave you, but you did!
Wonderful, wonderful imagery. The title was just beautiful.
5 more points for Team Sonneteer!
Thanks for entering!
Always,
Cassie
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