Trying to cope with all my fears
my every word, so sincere
But she doesn't listen
to a word I say
She thinks I blatantly
Lie to her face
The trust we had
I thought secure
I find betrayed
Air tight no more
For irony is a cruel mistress
That shall not loosen her grip to futures near
Author notes
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This one hurt....
Comments
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this is quite a simple piece and everything you've written here is so true about trust. i'm not sure if the last two lines should be included in the piece since it kind of seem off topic but then again, it did give a nice touch to your poem =] nicely done ^^
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Worth squinting at:)
The backgound/font combination makes this difficult to read, but I enjoyed it all the same. You conveyed the common experience of unjust mistrust
quite well.
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Short, but says a lot about the emotions that come from betrayal. I think you have a good basis for a much stronger poem if you work with this a bit. Your thoughts are well-put.
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Aww. I'm sorry
I've had to deal with betrayal at both ends and there's really few things that hurt as bad. I probably hurt more rom actually betraying someone. Good write~ I especially loved those last two lines.
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