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Empty Notebook



White pages ,tell me a story or two.

Stories with sweet beginnings ,and divine endings ,

Filled with deep hearts and unbroken promises.

Of  bright moons at night,

of  blue waters smoothening gravel in rivers,

of  strong hands kissing the soft ones,

And then embracing each other.

Of never having to say goodbyes,

Having to lay in a beloved’s arms as the days go by.

White pages ,tell me these stories

So my dreams may come true,

Tell me these stories ,through and through.

Author notes

you r doing a very commendable work with this contest. i dont believe myself to be a very good poet,bt poetry i love to do and i certainly would want to be a part of this.

i really like this piece of mine,which i think is quite simple,plz consider it,if you find it to your requirements.

I (Neha Chaudhary), hereby allow Mackerth to use my poem for the intended purpose

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  • lindaburns gold member
    February 16, 2008
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    I like your poem enough to put it in the finals except
    for the technical problems. There are at least 5
    places where you space before your comma. In this
    particular contest, punctuation counts and I don’t think
    you can make corrections because the contest is closed.
    That’s too bad.


  • MrsJones
    February 9, 2008

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    Beautiful! I loved this imagrey you use in this poem, it's great. Something also I think poets and writers alike can relate to. Thank you for entering.


  • N e a r
    February 3, 2008

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    This is an interesting write. I like how you are telling the notebook to give you stories, when you yourself will be the one to make them... almost like asking for these pages to be your guide and help you write a fantastic write that will amazing all.
    Which makes that an amazing poem. Creative idea, it's new and refreshing for me to read!

    Thanks for sharing & entering my contest A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • mackereth
    January 23, 2008

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    First of all, i would like to thank you for entering this contest, just by doing this, you are giving hope to everyone that this has affected. I really like the idea of this poem, using the blank pages of a story book to tell a story without words. Although i usually like poems that rhyme, this one seemed better off without the rhymes. Thanks again for your entry and good luck in the contest.


  • Xsafety glassX
    January 22, 2008
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    o wow. better than i can write by a LOT!!

    KUDOS!! thanx for entering


  • Sia
    January 18, 2008

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    Thanks for entering!!!!

    Wonderful write. Blank pages pave the road of endless wonder and imagination. Great job, and Good luck in the contest ^_^ @>}-

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