Dissections are to proceed immediately
to ensure that a massacre of genius ensues
(Though I must beg forgiveness for my brevity -
the connections to imagination seems to have become somewhat pruned)
But I swear, sunrises taste different there
when a timeless cosmos is finally found,
somewhere along the progression of Satan's endless diatribes
against Sunday mornings' pathetic, raucous sounds
Either way, win or lose
apathy never is the way back to what we once hoped it was
as gardens are planted in a masochistic sense of empty needs
forming tertomas that must be removed
And so the church claimed their endless ebullient inheritance
lodged on papers in the process of being deciphered
for the eternal joy of those never ambivalent
a piece of "pie in the sky" at the hands of perfect words
So some cinch their belts tighter
hoping to avoid sacreligious fates
and attempt to read braile with their eyes
when their fingers would have been a better way
Author notes
Oh man, I had fun writing this.
A bit of my own somewhat comedious diatribe on my feelings about the church of America today. It claims to be a ship, but if it is, there has never been a ship so full of holes as that one is.
-Thefallout
(and yes. I am kind of poking fun at the contest hosts with the mention of brevity...see the poem I originally wrote for the contest before it was pointed out that there was a 20 line limit ....http://allpoetry.com/poem/3817751 Yea. About that...)
A contest entry
- The Word Bank from "H" "E" Double Hockey Sticks by Abby In Chains..
15750 points, ended January 27, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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And just for that I want to see double the words in 20 lines ...
J/K. I have my own thoughts about the church within it's boat-erfic voyage ... and none too great for the religious church goers at heart. But I digress ...
I knew you could do it!
It has been some time since I've seen such a comedic religious poem. You have a descriptive picture, yes we like to call that imagery, going on. Like the ending.
Great job with this and good luck in the contest!
~Steve
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