I told her this over pie and coffee on a Friday morning,
the prunes of my grandmother's fingers twirling
as she knitted, reminiscent of earlier days
when wonder was something humanity knew was necessary
and when life was a way of faith
"I will not be a timeless sense of genius
bought, sold, and painted on a page
cut from the connections of imagination
and exchanged for purchased pains
The seats of Sunday's mornings
and sacred Monday's work
each swear a stronger inheritance
of ebullient emotion's worth
But I've never found this sense of satisfaction
that I've heard of so many times
when we're tied to the relentless wings of progression
my heart doesn't seem to beat quite right
The tangerine tangle of early mornings
and the insomniac of me in moonlight moments
lost in the massacre of countless pages
dissected throughout the room
As I try to create a cosmos better than this one
where amphigories finally make sense
where people truly do fall in love
and never fall out again
But then I wake from opium's slumber
and the apathy of beautiful dreams
to face this city that's forgotten its sense of wonder
and exchanged hearts for cold machines
But I've never found this sense of satisfaction
that I've heard of so many times
when we're tied to the relentless wings of progression
my heart doesn't seem to beat quite right
Highways form their own sort of tertoma
overlaying the truth of life below
to scream a hole through the rushing hours
is an impossible way to save a soul
Our emptiness is barathrum;
savage and unendingly fierce
as we strive to be what nothing ever was
after salvations that are never sure
Braille painted what our hearts couldn't feel
to decipher the pangs lifeless days
because we never become who we want to be
when the world lies dying in the way
Oh, I've never found this sense of satisfaction
that I've heard of so many times
when we're tied to the relentless wings of progession
my heart doesn't seem to beat quite right
I'll tell them to cinch their boots on tight
so we can finally run truly free
because ambivilance never was a savior
and masochists never could love the spring
So I'll set this war against all the world
if that's what it takes to be
we'll reach heights no one ever could
if only they'll come with me."
She smiled, and nodded knowingly
as only a grandmother can
there was a glint of young age's fire in her eyes
as she sipped, set down her cup and said,
"Well said, grandson.
With boys like you
this world may yet have chances left."
Author notes
Still some small revisions to do, pretty much finished though. (Finished being a loosely used term for me when it comes to poems...)
-Thefallout
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Wow ~ so much put in this write ~ thinking back to the a day ~ where life is simple ~ happy in the way it was ~ if we could only make a nice combination of the future progress ~ success ~ with a part of the old ways tooo ~ You carry your traditions within ~ your grandmother will be a part of you and your children ~ the more you share ~ the harder it is to lose those ~ important values ~ Nice write ~ you can clearly see how much work you put into this ~ nice job!
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This was very nice...I liked it a lot.
"I'll tell them to cinch their boots on tight
so we can finally run truly free
because ambivilance never was a savior
and masochists never could love the spring"
were good lines.
Thanks for entering, and good luck
Brandon -
As info, We set a line limit ... 20 lines or less.
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ah, good to know. Not sure how I missed that.
Well, here I go again
(I was going to say...the contest seemed rather easy for the amount of points)
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