Lightning flashes, thunder claps loud
Muffling the thoughts and muting the sound
Inside, a delicate caress and embrace
Lovers entwined, face to face
Rain pounding upon the roof and the window
Dancing lovers resting against the pillows
As they sing together, a song, only they know the tune
Lightning is the key, drums the thunder's boom
Begin a delicate, sweet dance and embrace
Pick up the tempo, pick up the pace
Rain drumming up the beat
Entwined together, head to feet
The peek of the storm comes to an end
Breathless they hold each other until the next storm begins
Author notes
^~-Contest Option-~^
5. write me something, suggestively romantic, arousing, seductive, etc.. but no erotica..
A contest entry
- Options, Quotes. by LoveDeprived.
700 points, ended December 1, 2008, 15 entries
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Very beautiful... I am going to post a poem I wrote a long time ago, with help from a friend, it'll be the most recent post I make, it's something like this...
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Wow!! Definately an eye catcher and a crowd pleaser. It caught my attention immediately. Great write this is really well described and beautiful all at once. Good job once again.
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This was just brilliant!! Your choice of words are great, and the imagery is amazing. It really gets the mind working, and takes you to "that place"
It's very sensual, not dirty, but sexy ;-]
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very nice. its so sweet and tender. ilove the setting. i also dont know what to say lol. awsome write. as mom said "those damn comma's and spaces!" lol awsome.
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omg you are such a wonderful poet Brent. Its simply devine reading your poetry, I enjoy it every time. I always said you were great and this proves and it. I love the rythum and the rhymes. I also love how it reminds me of me and my boyfriend right now. Thank you for the memories and this great write
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Wow. This is just beautiful. I love the setting of the storm. wowowowowow!
Always,
Cassie
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Nice, very sweet and subtle. It is the G rated erotica. I love it...I felt the sweetness this held. I could almost hear the storm flashing as the lovers were entwined...this is truly wonderful, Great write,
Stephanie -
Mmm... this reminds me of my first time... in a pool at midnight in a storm... course if my parents had come downstairs i think i woulda been paddling down shit creek instead lol. a great piece
hugs,
georgie,
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all i have to say is that you're a poetical pervert.
teehee. just kiddin. uh let's see.... your spelling is definitely improving. your grammar and puncuation are getting better as well. but what did i tell you about those damn spaces and commas!? *sigh* you still need work. great, brilliant, and amazing imagery used here. even though it described something sexual, it's not gross or over the top in any way. it's sweet and romantic actually. you and your thunderstorms.... tsk tsk. 
on that note, i'm outta here. as always, keep up the good work.
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