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First Lines

Dear Sarah,
How are you?
I'm not quite sure what my boots have to do with hide & seek, followers, lead the way to the broken advent trees line the parking lot full of
Cheap labor:
I want you;
Laid out on familiar, still groggy, breathing in the morning air.
Motorcycle rides of childhood, that scent he had on his shoulder of fish and suicide fills my nostrils,
the migration to your heart took longer than we thought.

Author notes

Wow that makes no sense. Worth a try!
poems from:[sorry they aren't in order as in this poem, i forgot to do it as i went, but they're from newest to oldest]

http://allpoetry.com/poem/3764270
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3521166
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3521144
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3242250
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3192080
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2972654
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2969793
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2804512
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2769626
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2617168
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2607152







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  • misselaineous
    February 4, 2008

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    this is wonderful
    well done indeed
    i am going to read all the poems in context now
    because the lines you have used are great!
    elaine

  • Nicole Hanna
    February 3, 2008
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    Did you change this from when it was first entered? It looks like it's laid out differently. lol. But, regardless, this actually DOES make sense. Perhaps it's a matter of who is reading it and the associations they make with it. I believe I remember reading that last line before and loved then as I do now. Thanks for the entry.


  • unbroken record
    January 19, 2008
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    fish & suicide.

    bizarrely touching, in a way that feels wrong.


    hm.


  • parachute fog
    January 18, 2008
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    i agree, the last lines are brilliant.


  • LadyAmalthea
    January 18, 2008

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    "the migration to your heart took longer than we thought."

    oh wow. That is really amazing, like I am struck by that. Its pink and brittle, like a pitch dark cave sparkling fuschia. It aches and is so colorful and like filled with pictures.

    <3x

  • vertigo beat
    January 18, 2008

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    -some unneeded capitalization in there.

    -it does make sense.

    -reminded me of a drama i'm watching. [don't ask]

    -those last two lines were really good.


  • girl shaman
    January 17, 2008

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    ah hunniee put down the links to the poems where oyu got the lines from!!
    but i love the last line alot..
    mine didnt make sense either not sure if their supposed to lol but it is definatly worth the try

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