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Behind Self Love is Self Loathing



She could see beauty within the divinity of self;

when looking in the mirror, her eyes littered with tears.

Kisses of lipstick fantasies, ran along the mirrors side.

Narcissistic namelessly, she was classed a self obsessed,

with her older sisters chastising her,

uttering untruths like, 'boys don't go for that'.

Tears would calmly slide now her pale young cheeks,

running her mascara and messing up the moisturizer's touch;

all she knew was that her sister did not have a clue,

what was going on inside her pained and aching heart.

She made herself believe she could be beautiful,

by purchasing cosmetics and beauty magazines;

if she believed in herself that much she'd never take advice,

from anorexic models and plastic porn film stars.

The glass shattered, as her self image imploded;

her insides shattered, her courage demolished,

yet again a lonely soul in a messed up world.

'What's wrong with a little self loving,'

she cries, as she pulls her damn hair from her cheeks,

'it's not like anyone else will love me.'

Author notes

this piece is about a girl who pretends to love herself and respect herself, but when reminded of how she truly feels she breaks down. I got this idea because I know that some people I know act as if they love themselves and respect themselves but deep down, they can't stand themselves and have more issues than you could imagine. I guess what I'm trying to say this teaches us that we all have self doubts and there is no such thing as perfection. This is sad, but it's true for many people to feel this way.

Please don't mention my name in the contest as it's an anonymous contest.

Thanks, opinions greatly appreciated ♥


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  • ourgirlFriday
    August 1, 2008

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    Wow-

    Very powerful poem! Your right; many women and girls feel this way, and I'm learning that men and boys do, too. More issues than a magazine, as we say. I feel like I'm reading a new take on "Sleeping Beauty."


  • Pandorea
    April 30, 2008

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    "Tears would calmly slide now her pale young cheeks,
    running her mascara and messing up the moisturizer's touch;"

    wow. this is really powerful...personalising the issue of self-image.

    thanks for entering.


  • letters to no one
    April 26, 2008
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    I just read this poem again,
    And I have to say you have written it very well indeed.

    You use a lot of alliteration, but subtlely, not going over the top with it.

    Well done!

  • letters to no one
    April 19, 2008

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    This is a great write, great meaning and purpose, one thing I have to point out in the opening line of stanza 2 you wrote, "she was classed a self obsessed"

    It should be "she was classed as self obsessed"

    Otherwise, very good.
    Good luck in the contest!


  • alexandra.
    March 16, 2008

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    Splendid!

    This is such a strong piece, and I really do love it! You have a nice knack for vocabualy, expressing thought dead level with mine but in much a better way than I ever could. The part about "what's wrong with a little self loving..it's not like anyone else will love me" is a really powerful imge of a broken facade, pretending that everything's alright it isn't, far from it. The part about "anoxeric models an plastic porn film stars" is so true of todays world where everywhere we go we are surrounded by billboards of beautiful people telling us to BUY!BUY!BUY! THIS WILL MAKE YOU BEAUTIFUL! although I don't think you needed to put film in that line, it makes it seem a little too long, but that's being really picky!
    I love it!


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    March 10, 2008

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    Thanks for entering this here The poem has lots of feeling to it. I like it. Pretty well written to far as puncts and grammar goes. Good luck with it here Let's see what Susan says about it now.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    February 4, 2008
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    This has some wonderful imagery within. A very well constructed poem, superb!


  • Naridill gold member
    January 19, 2008

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    Beautiful and soft. Your words are deep and captivate the inners of me while reading. Very beautiful. Nicely penned.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    January 18, 2008

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    this is something i can relate closely to and that is all i can say, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • polly filla
    January 18, 2008
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    proetry! telling it like it is

    subtle internal rhymes, too!

    [ps] I don't think you need to explain in your notes, as the poem depicts the situation very well; the storyline is strong

    thanks for the read


  • Shantalina
    January 18, 2008
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    'What's wrong with a little self loving,'

    she cries, as she pulls her damn hair from her cheeks,

    'it's not like anyone else will love me.'


    I honestly ask myself something along those lines EVERYDAY.

    This is beautiful.
    Thank you so much for entering!!

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