Do you remember me?
The one who fought,
Against your wrongs.
Do you remember me?
The one who always fell,
But nevers stayed down.
Do you remember me?
The one you killed,
Or at least tried.
Do you remember me?
The only one who really knew,
Knew the truth from the lies.
Do you remember me?
The one you loved,
The one who hated you.
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I loved the repitition of Do you remember me, very effective. This feels very much like a confrontation of sorts or a venting in any event. Good write, thanks for sharing this.
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Hey aj.vamp
I really like this! You've expressed some good emotion here and I can feel it as I read through your poem. It's an empowering poem I feel and I like the positive attitude presented in some of the lines:
"The one who always fell,
But nevers stayed down."
All in all a nice write! I'll be checking out more of your work!
~Avalin~ -
In Line six you need to fixed "tayed" to stayed.
But to say the least its strong.
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