Saturday Princess
Should we count the names
of 3 a.m. come Saturday’s closing bars
when you live the lines of you’re My-space promise,
cat mewing, paws clawing haphazard
under your bedroom door.
In a box marked ‘never’
I daringly search transparencies
whose beauty dripped slowly under
gravity
bowed by heat,
yellowed with nicotine patches
to match circles under apologizing eyes.
there are fingerprints on
cracking skin my tongue
cannot dissolve--
like Jell-O shots
over stretch marks.
Funny there are no children to wake
when your laughter is Jack and Coke
slaughtering the hallway
to your door.
That was a promise
dressed in knit sweaters
Plum skinned when crying ‘mother’
Who never knew the milk and honey of your nights
But I won’t linger long to broach the subject
of glass houses
fearing to bear crosses
where nails shatter walls.
Author notes
Feel free to interview me . Option 1! Option 1! I say. She looks like a puppet and I've met a few
A contest entry
- I'm a Bitch, I'm a Lover? by Poetic Obscenity.
1000 points, ended July 6, 2008, 41 entries
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900 points, ended July 16, 2008, 35 entries
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Comments
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there are fingerprints on
cracking skin my tongue
cannot dissolve--
like Jell-O shots
over stretch marks.
Lol...best description of stretch marks I've ever read.
This piece is both playful yet sticks out like porcupine quills seeking fleshy pads to bleed. Intriguing and enjoyable.
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although..
your work might seem fleshy to others. I think it lacks texture and substance -
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I had no idea I was writing a steak!
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Another interesting piece from you. I liked stanza 4 the best. I'd go more in-depth; but I got too much sun on my beach trip today; and it zapped my energy. I enjoyed reading this
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This poem was interesting. Some bits I didn't understand but that was one of the things I really liked about it, I didn't need to understand it for it to sound good. I shall message you after the contest =D thank you for entering and good luck.
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Good dark work on this one David. I liked the presentation with this. Keep it up!!
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Thank you. =]
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wow, that was somewhat depressing but a good write none the less, best of luck in the contest
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Bravo
Though i do infact love this piece dearly. I can't put you into the finalists list unless you follow the rules. Rule being, Put your option in your authors notes. That's my only "problem"
However this is a very wonderful piece.
I feel it flowed very well and had a very insomniac feel to it. -
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I fixed it Sorry
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I really like this, you had an insomnia like tone to this, and I really like that. Best of luck in the contest.
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Gosh, I loved the darkness in this.. the dripping contempt shows through to the very end. Wonderful imagry and great flow, Absolutely loved this!!
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