I am so hungry
thirsting for warm blood,
Drooling with deathlust,
needing that potion.
I undergo the change,
the vampyr change;
My only desire is to
rip out the throats
Of my helpless victims
and gorge on blood,
Their gore dripping down
my demented jowls,
Staining my shirt front
to my constant irritation.
A contest entry
- animal changing by leo wings.
425 points, ended January 26, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is no fantasy, please believe me. I love to sup on blood.
Comments
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wowowowowowowow.
I really liked this. It is lascivious and dark. My Verdict: come and get it, this poetry could convince anyone to being your blood donor ;]
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bring it on, my bloods yours, with peotry like this you deserve it
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JOLLY GOOD
ahh what beautiful imagery you have created..
i am very pleased to have stumbled upon this piece of work.
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Came here to return the favour
This one should have been GOLD for sure - Haha - very good imagery here - I could hear the sound of blood gushing out in spurts timed to the hearts beat of the virgin being sucked - mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm - as I read this ---------------------- good luck in the comtest - I hate dark poetry - Bless God - Joe - Prince of Light
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Um.
I don't like dark "poetry" really at all. So. I can't think of anything to say that would be useful to you. -
I want more like this!
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well...
replacing "vampire" with "vampyr" doesn't do nothing but make the writer appear more like a try hard then a serious poet. Stick to the basics, you don't need to dassle your audience with flash and big fancy words, just get out what you have to say. Overall a good write mind you, just needs tweaking
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Disgusting. I LOVED IT! It is exactly what I would expect changing into a vampire to be like. Thank you for entering animal changing I am glad I got the cance to read it. Congratulations on Honorable Mention =]
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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"I am so hungry
thirsting for warm blood,"
This made me shiver! Good job and good luck in the contest! -
WOW pretty dark. I luv it thanks for entering
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crap. I mean't "great".
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o.0..... Drooling!!!!! (lol) I love it. It's really grate. you've got a talent for writing poetry. Good job.
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Very Good
Imagery Was Very Nice
Interesting And Everything
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