I promise you this
I promise you this
My sights are to fix everything between you and I
To all the fights
To all the stress and chaos i may have cause
I promise you this
No more heavy fights
So much more less stress and chaos
More smiles instead of frowns
Happiness instead of saddness
I promise you this
My thoughts and my goals are to never hurt you like i did
And to mend the broken pieces between you and me
I promise you this
If given a other shot
I swear i won't fail doing these things for you.
A contest entry
- Title, Titles and More Titles by HeavensNewestAngel.
600 points, ended January 31, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this reminds me alot of the poem u wrote me "i promise"
its still good tho.
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good luck with that hope yu the best and great write it really is hard to make such a promiss i love it whne a man has enough balls to make it anyways that means he is willing to try great write loved it...
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Lovely Promise!
Suggestions: All the fights
All the stress and chaos I may have caused
***(So much more) Less stress and chaos
My thoughts and (my) goals are to never hurt you like i did ***You might want to consider either using all cap. I(s) or not!I i! It's always(I remind myself)good to be consistent! ***[And to] Mend the broken pieces between you and me ~ You presented your emotions well. Best of luck in the contest! I hope I've helped you. :-)
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i love this one
love this one this one is good i love it
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This is a great poem. Best of luck in my contest
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