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slavegirl-lost

slavegirl-lost is out here, scared and alone

Seeking a Mistress, to make Her own

Property, enslaved for You she will become

In Your service Ma’am she’ll make her home

 

With her eyes of blue and long brown hair

Your pleasure will be her only wish and care

slavegirl-lost needs to be found by You

her Mistress to whom she can always be true

 

Small in height at 5’3, and stature, elfin is she

Delicate, feminine but strong, she desires to be

A servant to Your sexual desire and pleasure

A toy for Your delight, she will take the pressure

 

slavegirl-lost seeks a Mistress to please

In desperation, she is begging here on her knees

Nipples perked for the touch of Your clips

Ass bared for the lashes of Your whips

 

slave will keep her pussy shaved and wet

Ready for Your service Ma’am as You expect

Tight but moist, ready for all You desire

Fingers, tongue, even candles alight with fire

 

slavegirl-lost needs guidance and a firm hand

When she does fail to follow Your command

Correction given is so Your slave does learn

Even though lessons are harsh and often burn

 

slavegirl-lost awaits for You to make a claim

Take her, possess her, give her a name

Till then dial this number please do

And at the tone simply ask for Sue

 

Author notes

My ideal lover doesn't exist as I am bi-sexual so have gone with my perfect slave girl as I am in that mind set working on a lesbian fetish story.

 

Some explanations for those who read not into or don't know the BDSM (Bondage Discipline/Domination Sadism/submissive/slave Master/Mistress/masochism) lifestyle:

BDSM features strong in my life, sexual and non sexual so have used that too. Hence I have used what may seem as incorrect upper case letters to reflect the status of the Dominant and lower case letters to represent the submissive as is standard now in the BDSM community. The piece is written in third person perspective as a slave would never refer to her/himself as I or me, but always as she/he her/him etc. Please note BDSM is based on SSC (safe, sane and consensual) and RACK (risk awareness consensual kink) no one should be forced into anything they don't want to be.

 

OOOOPS forgot my sources silly me, research notes from Collar Me, Castlerealm, D/s Kiosk, The Frugal Domme etc.

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  • PassionsPromise gold member
    January 23, 2008
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    Scores:
    Spelling/grammar:20
    Presentation:20
    Originality:20
    How well handled challenge:20
    Overall-20

    Total: 100 actually I think this was the best. Indeed you hit a homerun with this one. Good luck to you in this challenge.

    Passions


  • shimmer
    January 22, 2008
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    spelling/grammar=20
    presentation=20
    originality=20
    how well you handled challenge=20
    overall=20
    total score 100

    you really hit this on the nail!


  • Tattboyspet
    January 22, 2008
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    Spelling and grammar = 20
    Presentation = 20
    Originality = 20
    'Grab Me' Effect = 20
    Overall = 20
    TOTAL = 100/100

    Excellent piece and well thought out - well done!


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    January 21, 2008
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    Your score

    My score for your round one entry

    spelling/grammar - 20
    presentation - 20
    originality - 20
    how well you handled challenge - 20
    overall - 20
    _____________________________

    Total -100

    Congrats!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    January 19, 2008
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    Damn is all I am going to say.
    I too, reread and reread and no errors to be found.
    I loved it from beginning to end.
    Had me well, .....definately wondering if she has her Mistress, or if she is still seeking LOL.
    Well done.

    Suggestions: None I find this totally to my liking.

    Best wishes to you in this contest.

    Passionspromise

    (love the Bg as well...)


  • Tattboyspet
    January 18, 2008

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    ~taking a magnifying glass and going over it ... AGAIN~
    Nope, I find NOTHING to fault you on ... well done!


  • shimmer
    January 17, 2008

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    i have not heard the term RACK here before so you taught me something new here. i congratulate you on doing research for this piece and at one time or another i have visted each of the resource you listed here. i think most have. also i understand the need for explaining the way you use caps in here as some do think when seeing this that it is full of mistakes.

    this is a good write and i like the name you have given her.


  • The Poetic Angel
    January 17, 2008

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    fantastik write Jems M'Lady

    considering Your not a slave giggles
    good luck in the challange

    xxx Your cheeky lil angel xxx


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    January 17, 2008
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    BRAVO!

    This is an outstanding piece. I love it. I see nothing wrong with this at all.

    I applaud your explanation in your authors notes about the BDSM lifestyle and different terminology. Simply a most excellent entry.

    I will score this upon deadline of this round.

    **Master Ktulu**

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