The once roaring fire was now dying
Red embers left, marking its death
Whispering smoke, a few sparks were flying
As the fire gave out its last breath
How long I’d watched seemed forever
An eon since I’d saw her go
I’d dreamt of us, always being together
But still, she walked out my door
I look at the wine glass, now broken
Scattered, like diamonds in the night
And I remember the words I had spoken
And I knew I was not in the right
My mind drifted back to around seven
To the restaurant, where I waited for her
when she walked in, I was in heaven
For the lord had answered my prayer
She told me her name was Irene
I said I’m Paul, and I kissed her hand
I'm thinking, she liked what she seeing
Which made me, one happy man
As we ate we stared at each other
with passion so full of desire
She told me of her sister and brother
I Said I had a flat with a fire
I asked, if she would come home with me
She said yes just for one small nightcap
After that well we’ll just have to see
Which made me one jolly happy chap
We Snuggled up close, on the sofa
A glass of red wine, in our hands
I leaned across and I kissed her
My butterflies doing handstands
I told her that she was so beautiful
As I Whispered sweet nothings in her ear
I said I’m falling for you Eileen
That’s when she pushed me well clear
What are you doing, She shouted
what in the hell is your game
Do you think I’ll give it to you, She pouted
You can't even remember my name
I said, I really do know your name
As sure as I know that mines Paul
I said Marlene That’s what they call you...
And that’s when the glass hit the wall
So here I am just sitting
Coz I made one stupid little gaffe
And my sides, well my sides they are splitting
Coz all you can do is laugh
A contest entry
- Dazed And Confused by CherryOnTop.
900 points, ended January 20, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A jolly jolly story with reminders to us all that our names are important to us. Nothing much confused about your writing.

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Nice little story with a message, just remember her name in future, at least there appeared to be a funny side to it.
The tale is well told and easy to follow.
All the best in the contest...Sue


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Lol! Nice job on this. Put a smile on my face! Lol! More than a smile. At least you can laugh and that means you're going to be just fine. Better than fine. Just remember their names!
--Kel
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HAHA!!! You made me smile with this. Man I bet you had to duck
Thank you and good luck in my contest.




