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The Red Dress

Once upon a time
A red dress walked by
I saw a tender night of love
Where wine flowed and hearts became as one
Where touch brought response
And love began to grow
Minutes last forever
And hands never stopped their flow
From top to bottom it just began
Kisses and tongue they mixed
With the touch of two as one
The midnight hour came and went
So came the morning light
In each others arm we laid
Completely satisfied

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Still a fantasy, But soon I hope.

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  • SilverButterfly gold member
    January 18, 2008

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    whoa! verrrry sensual and romantic!!! you can sure write these with no problem lol.

    GBY
    SilverButterfly
    (Mary)


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    January 17, 2008
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    Very nice image here,
    hope all is good for 2008.
    Slán Dolores

  • June-bug
    January 17, 2008

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    very detailed fantacy..espically like the part where from top to bottom it just begun. kisses and tongue mix, when in the morning light they find themselves in each others arms completely satified.

  • Devine4u
    January 17, 2008
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    I like your fantasy. Good write


  • Nicotine Eyes
    January 17, 2008
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    Aww. this was cute.

    [♥]Nicotine.

  • pruedence
    January 17, 2008

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    Nothing like a little red dress to get you going...black is good too..this is great...I could see all happening while reading , thanks for sharing


  • Devils Reject
    January 17, 2008
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    Awww this is a lovely piece. Very touching and warm. Good luck with it coming true


  • Animarising
    January 17, 2008

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    Well first of all, good luck with the fantasy coming true! Ahem.
    OK, I like this, it works pretty well. Frankly though the first half for me works better than the second half. This may be a reflection on me and my love of foreplay, but I don't think so. It seems a little rushed towards the end (*insert own joke here*) if you don't mind me saying, and a little weak. For example, the last line comes over as a little bit 'everyday'. I mean, I'm 'completely satisfied' by a large chicken pie and chips, but the situation you describe seems to warrant something stronger.
    Anyway, nice work, hope that ramble means something

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