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when two worship within making love...





here is our holiness, praise spoken in tongues
becoming oh God, thankyou, thankyou, thankyou!
easter echoing within the rising and rebirth
equalling soft-sighed rejeuvenation
of this church where my love and I meet
each others countless commandments,
the only confession offered up
is one of mutual hunger
to worship, worship like this,
as our spirits feel internally
the white-hot heat of candlelit
flickering flame,
we kneel at our own altar
christening a celebration
of revelations...




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Yvette Champ








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  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    dagg..

    whew, is it hot in here or do u just burn up pages!!?/ l.o.l. yeah..like it..alot!

    • Yvette Champ gold member
      November 17, 2008
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      Thankyou...

      Am delighted you liked this spiritual/physical complete-sweet-connection


  • LadyLavender gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    Dios Mio! Oh My God, in Spanish

    Yvette! Yvette! Yvette! I can't admire you more then I do...there are limits. LOL

    You're amazing.


  • Hecate616
    January 23, 2008
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    ohh I like!
    best of luck!


  • ellipsist
    January 21, 2008

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    I love this... the tone, the passion with which it's written... the rushed feeling and somewhat hurried (but in a good way, a damn good way ) flow to it...

    in fact, that hurried flow, that rush that I get, feel from reading it, that sense of being rushed during m reading of your pieces (does that make sense?) is one of my favorite things about your poetry!


  • Gregor Samsa
    January 19, 2008
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    Stumped to add to the comments already posted. You have outdone yourself.

  • Bad Bill
    January 18, 2008

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    An intelligent and powerful piece, my poetic friend. I love the way you express making love in terms of religious imagery. Portraying love as a sacred act is not new, but you have brought a freshness to the concept--very well done.

    Bill


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    January 18, 2008

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    Oh my, but how beautiful this is!
    A most excellent sharing in this contest and in the poetry world, in general
    Wishing you all the very best!!!

  • Cinnarry gold member
    January 18, 2008
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    oh my, this is sticky sweet!


  • tara wilson gold member
    January 17, 2008

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    beautiful..it is something of a worship of another, it is a sacred act, spiritual, for sure, what a lovely poem -aM


  • birch
    January 17, 2008
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    Love is quite spiritual. I'm glad to see that someone else agrees with me. J


  • Nicolette gold member
    January 17, 2008

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    "we kneel at our own altar"

    wow, this is beautiful...the genesis of bodies in the temples of love. Now you make me want to kneel too .

    Simply beautiful and great application of metaphor - loved this one, poetess and the sense of sacred love and lovemaking you've penned here. This is elegant sensuality!!

    ~ Nicolette

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