My tears are running down my face
And every things gone bad
Its time to control this anger inside
I'm sure you're not going to be sad
I've seen some people go through with this
And now it is my turn
Its about time i do this
But you're not going to learn
Why I'm doing this, and what I'll do
Is now up to my mind
I'll go away and never come back
I'm sure you'll be fine
This poem is about my life
Not that you'll really care
I need to take matters into my hands
Because I can't seem to bear
My tears are running down my face
And every things gone bad
It's about time i do this now
Please never be sad!
Author notes
I would prefer it if you didn't criticize my poem much as this is what i am feeling. And it isn't nice if you dis how people are feeling
A contest entry
- ==Dark Contest,Lots of options!!!== by xXsoulxcollectorXx.
550 points, ended February 11, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ****CALLING ALL DARK POETS**** by Erika Elektrikka.
2600 points, ended March 12, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Kill Me by LullabyxxDreamer.
600 points, ended July 4, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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beautiful write
good luck -
This was good. Im not going to criticize it, but I will say I think the rhythm could have been a tad bit better...but other than that, i think it is great that you can let your emotions flow from pen into poetry.
Good Luck,
Erika
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very good write,i can relate to it,please read rule # 9 and may i ask which option you chose???anyways,thanks for entering the contest...
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Most ppl would say that's emo, but I understand. Sometimes you just get really sad and there's nothing you can do about it. Well written; sometimes I feel that way too.
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