As the darkness surrounded me
Tears rolled off my cheeks
Glass shattered around me
Yet I remained focused on you
You kept me from dying
Holding on so tight and
All I could breathe is your light.
Author notes
Option 4
Thank you for the contest...I haven't done anything like this before
A contest entry
- ~* Where Can You Take This... ~* by Desire.
700 points, ended January 20, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautifully Inscribed!
As always, your words weave wonderfully bright!
Thanks for sharing, and it's so nice reading you again.
Much love, Uncle Tim
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sad
Great write Tess....I have not been on for quite some time......As always.....Howard
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: All I Could...
This piece tugged at the Heartstrings for the message
You have weaved could be felt within each line...
I'm sensitive like that~~
The only thing I caught was the word:
focussed...Looks like one extra s slipped in there...
but that does not take away from Your words...~
These lines grabbed and pulled~
Tears rolled off my cheeks
Glass shattered around me
Yet I remained focussed on you
Magnificent take on the prompt~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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What a great job you did on this one!! I love it!! You said a lot in soooooo few words! The entire thing works so well...
Best of luck in this contest!!
Ek is lief vir jou altyd
Nyetta
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Aw wow this left me breathless. strikingly strong words
Cindy
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Very well done, hon
Glad to see you posting!
All the best to you!
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