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I Blink

I blink

early morning light

diffused by thick oily smoke

but I made it though another night

Barely breathing

and on a constant alert

how can everybody be angry

when it's only me I hurt

the deep bruising of my spirit

and the laceration of my soul

is what I allow to happen

with my lifestyle as a whole

each day I struggle through

hoping for a quicker end

praying someday God will hear

and grant the wish I send

my life is non-productive

though I know that many people love me

I don't mean to be ungrateful

I am just searching to be free

I do not wish to cause grief

any longer to those I love

I would still be close to them

and smile down from above

The freedom of floating

with a weightless spirit

is all I ever pray for

I wish that God would hear it

At what age do you think a child could read this?

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  • max337
    February 26, 2008
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    Hi, I like your poem a lot.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    February 5, 2008

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    This is one of the only times today I have read such poetic pain... you didn't rant and rave about how bad things were, you have put thought into constructing this so perfectly... well done'

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    • MjM
      February 13, 2008
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      i tried to make it work because it was fun and interesting ,but since ive only just started using this laptop,im NOT VERY GOOD ikept making mistakes,and ifelt like an idiot...so i gave up.sad thing is ,it really did get me over my computerfear!! i wasnt interested at all before i saw this site ,my roomate saw it and wanted me to try..so i loved i got to decorate and share,but especially ,i like to read others poems and i feel like i should get the fancy services or at least donate to the site?but that kevin guy needed to send me an address 4 the $order.i miss it!!


  • Creatress
    January 18, 2008

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    "The freedom of floating
    with a weightless spirit
    is all I ever pray for
    I wish that God would hear it"
    What a solid ending for this piece. Very emotional and personal and poetically put.
    Nice work,
    Creatress


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 17, 2008

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    I really like this!! Thoughts I have often had myself about my own life. These lines I could absolutely identify with:

    my life is non-productive
    though I know that many people love me
    I don't mean to be ungrateful
    I am just searching to be free

    Welcome to AP and I look forward to reading more from you!
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    • MjM
      January 17, 2008
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      Thanks!!thats exactly what i had wantedto hear

      I tried to send you this thank you note but it ended up on my own page?!Twice.Good thing i have a sense of humor!What ive been trying to say is thanks,you raised my confidence levels!!Iwanted to give you five star things for your comment,i hope i did it right this time...mjm.

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