Elf towers silhouette a cobalt sky
in the Northern Marches of the Shire;
and past them, one will find the sea,
and foaming breakers in the lea --
while music echoing from lute and lyre
calls up sharp images ... you laugh or cry
and sigh ... and homeward turn, as if to flee
a place too bright ... and pure ... desire
calls softly, and the urge to rest
overpowers all else in hobbit breast,
in awe of Eldamor's undying West.
Beware, beware, the seagulls call,
unwary Elves may linger there,
and find their very souls in thrall;
so Elvenkind, beware ... beware.
Author notes
Option: Middle Earth, appropriate, I think, as I was born on Tolkien's birthday.
A contest entry
- My Last Contest on AP by ZachP.
800 points, ended March 10, 2008, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Fading by Vagabond.
360 points, ended April 17, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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enjoyable read this one was, fantasy full of poetic flow and charm nicely penned poem.
Thanks for your entry and good luck to you in the contest.
xxx
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so very well done here...brings the familiar sounds of those magical and difficult places, and a vision of man struggling against forces that seem to change the very ground on which he stands...PK
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A wonderful poem about one of my all time favorite books and you have captured the essence with your words.
All the best in the contest...Sue
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I think about 50 more and you'll have it- a nice sonnet Middle Earth epic... (for me, that would be a lot of post-write tinkering...!)
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Thirty years ago ...
I might have thought about that, but nowadays I don't have the patience.
Thanks for stopping by.
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This is a perfect entry for this contest and penned so well. As you know, I'm an elf so this poem made me smile from ear to ear.
Love,
Amera♥
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Mille fois merci ...
thanks for stopping by.
I see you have a new pic. Very nice.
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goegeous...
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I love this piece Jim, but then again I am a sucker for all things Tolkien and this simply shines of the Shire. May I say well done and good luck in the contest. Val
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Great work on this entry, thanks for taking the time to put it in my contest.
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Simple, yet complex and deep
just like the writing of the Professor himself.
Thank you for your entry.
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Mille fois merci.
Je vous souhaite du meilleur possible dans l'avenir avec vos études et avec vos écritures. et de l'allégresse dans le reste de votre vie.
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The road that leads to havens grey
Must ever onward go
Though Hobbits by the road may play
For elves this is not so
Undying West has a hold so great
Across the Sundered sea
The elvish ships can sail it straight
Not bent like you and me
Beware the gulls you elvish folk
The call of home they cry
Once heard you're doomed to shed your yoke
And from these lands you'll fly...
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Thank you for stopping by and commenting. Let me return the favor on this beautiful little melifluous masterpiece of Middle Earth. There is an enviable quality of word choice that is at once tranquil and profound. Good job on staking an early claim to the Gold!
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I'm really impressed with how you brought vision of Middle Earth to my mind! Your diction is flawless here, this is a wonderful tribute to Tolkien.
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Well done
I would think that Elrond and the High Council themselves would have approved of this one
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Such a beautifully written contest. Your words are easily understood and with such meaning. I wish you luck in the contest. I shall say a prayer that you win. Love ya
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Excellent. Captures the essence of Middle Earth without adhering slavishly to what has already been said. The form provides a perfect counterpoint to the winding, twining language, imagery, and sentence structure. It is a beautiful piece throughout. Wonderful work with diction.
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