This is now
our love was then...
I never expected
to see you again
but I did to night
and you were with her
I dont remember that light in your eyes
being that bright
or your smile
being so big
I came back to tell you
I had been stupid
and I wanted another chance
but you looked so happy
during that last dance
so remember now I love you
just as much as I did back then
and if you're ever willing
I'll share that love with you again
Author notes
Rawr Monkey
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Comments
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I could almost see this come to life.Very good.Hope all is greaty in your life here in dreary Pa.
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Very nicely written. Good form and rhyme. And a heart-felt story. Thank you for entering.
Pixie
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Tragic
How many I wonder wish time could be reversed.Sadly we are helpless to ride the tide of time,our past awash in bittersweet memories. -
this is really really good =]
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Hi Kristin.Thanks for reintroducing me to your poetry.Now I remember I do like your poems a lot.I will read more.Take care.
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This was good, right to the point. It was a bit sad though. Overall the poem flowed very nicely as well. Thank you so much for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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I really like the way you've laid out this poem. It gets right to the point. You've done a very nice job. You do have a mistake. In the next to last line it reads: If "your" ever willing. It should read: "you're." All else is great. Shancy.
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That was a very touching peice. I loved it, and my heart is spilling for this character here. Wow.
Silvos.
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