You never see him in the shadows
Yet you know that he is there
Ever silent ever watchful
For a moment unaware
Never think that you have passed him
For he sees you everywhere
He's the watcher in the darkness
Always far from spotlight glare
In city street at midday
At a crowded country fair
He will mark your every movement
Waiting 'til you look elsewhere
There's no way to avoid him
More tenacious than a bear
He can scent the slightest weakness
When your bravery will tear
The terror that can grip you
When no sound is in the air
Is the echo of his presence
He's the fear that we all share
Every person on his hit-list
Cannot know that they are there
But it's certain he is watching
And he holds you in his stare
Just close one eye when sleeping
And be thankful you've a pair
For the lurker in the shadows
Can get you from anywhere!
Author notes
demons
A contest entry
- In Honor of Raxacoricofallapatorious by Willowhaunt.
800 points, ended February 19, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~~~Demons~~~ by anguish.
395 points, ended July 25, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - (my ap family) prewrite contest by serenity silvermoon.
490 points, ended January 28, 115 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It’s a CREEPY Dark Rounds Contest by Paloszoo by Paloszoo.
1200 points, ended July 11, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please comment below. Spelling or rhyming or scanning corrections welcome.
Comments
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Great title for this chilling opiece. I feel the watcher all the time. I'm a wee bit paranoid
Love this. Great rhythm and rhyme. Thanks for entering my rounds contest and for showing your work here. It's a pleasure reading it! 
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nice write, this is as always spot on, perfect. We play a game in our family you have to spot a pebble on a beach, and try to hit it from a distance with another. sort of nail on the head, thing, if you get a hit you have to shout Cock on, this poem is cock on
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What Amelus64 said. And now I must stop reading your darker work, since I have to go to bed now and TRY to sleep (one eye open, indeed!!!) Lita
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I see in the author notes you have "demons", I feel that this piece goes way beyond that concept. The fear that we all share is an excellent way to put it.
Very good-good luck in the contest.
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Never look directly into his eyes for there lies madness and death.
Great write. Creepy.
Garrison
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Great entry - thanks and best of luck.
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this is an amazing poem... the way the words just fit together so well... i really understand what is going on in this poem... keep up the great work.
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Awesome!!!
I loved this piece, The rhyme and flow were flawless. Very suspenseful piece. Welcome to the finalists. Good Luck!!! -
This is great and Congrads on the trophy. I thought you didn't write or like dark poetry. You are very good at it.
Love,
Amera
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I usually have to feel very good to enjoy dark poetry, I don't like blood and gore but dark can be wonderful, I read and enjoy yours
I just don't admit it ...
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This is very eerie indeed! Yes, predators of all kinds lurk in the darkness and we never quite know how far away they are and when they are coming out to 'play'. It's always good to have safety in numbers. Very creepy, but ultimately true.
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I must say Jeff that this is an excellent write...congrats on the silver it is well deserved...I wish you well in this contest.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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awsome job with this
i'm shaking right now...lol
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Very nicely done. I like how you use the same rhyming sound the last few stanzas; it really makes the poem race at the end, making it mimic a frightened heartbeat. Well written!
Keep Quilling,
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I adore this! I think at times we've all been aware of him skulking around wither it's real or simple paranoia.It's beat is clearly there in reading and a thriller type that's inspiring.
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I really like this poem. Your words create a vivid picture in my mind, and the rhyming is very well thought. Great job.
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This reminds me of children fearing the "monsters" under the bed, or in the closest. When I was a child, many a night I spent huddled under the covers, afraid to go to sleep, and REALLY afraid to get up and go to the bathroom. Did a night light make any difference? Naaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!
When walking down the street at night, do you hear footsteps behind you? Uh-huh, I thought so...
Good scary write, Jeff, brought back many repressed memories.
Brazos
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Now you got me looking over my shoulders wondering where he is? Is the night his night? This one was radiant with fear, and it sure scared me.....
Novy
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Spooky
This is a very spooky tale, sounds like on of the scary movies that I used watch as a kid, excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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Love the twist in this.
ephiphany♥
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Yikes!!!! I know I will sleep with not only one eye open but with the lightson now as well....This was superb!!! So dark and deadly feeling..
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