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Swan Haiga/Swan Haiku

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Summer sunlight spills
kisses glossed petaled feathers
shadows summon swan



Joyce Josephson





Author notes

Poem alone is a Haiku.

On the picture it is a form called
a Haiga, a form using photos or paintings with matching haiku printed on them.

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  • Shantti silver member
    April 30

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    This is a gorgouse creation.
    Beatuiful haiku for a beatiful picture.
    Definately deserving of the gold.
    Sweet. Thank you for entering it in my contest here


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 27, 2008
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    This was beautiful and deserving of the Gold Congratulations


  • DawnBaby
    January 27, 2008

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    Congratulations!

    Beautiful job, definitely deserved the Gold! Congrats to you!!


  • Sonja
    January 27, 2008

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    Quality of this picture is stunning.

    Scores:

    Picture quality: 10

    Text layout: 10

    Haiku per se: 10

    Total scores: 30 of 30

    Nice done!

    • Freed by Mercy silver member
      January 27, 2008
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      Thanks so much! I believe I took the picture at Wild Animal Park in Escondido, just north of San Diego about 8 -10 years ago. I scanned the print, it was not a digital photo.


  • wakingdevil
    January 25, 2008

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    Loved the haiku with its wonderfully flowing alliterations which were as smooth as ther picture itself, well done and best of luck in the contest


  • The Poetic Angel
    January 17, 2008

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    Oh Joyce this is so butiful..the poem the pix and the background it all fits so perfik togefer
    xxx cheeky xxx


  • micol
    January 17, 2008

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    The repeating 's' sounds, along with the 'l', 'm', and 'w', seem to make the lines flow as smoothly as the water in the image. Very gentle, very subtle, very nice.

    • Freed by Mercy silver member
      January 17, 2008
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      Thanks, Micol! I tried to use soft sounds and alliteration with this, I'm glad you picked that up (and then some).


  • DawnBaby
    January 16, 2008
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    Beautiful!

    I love your background and your haiku! Both are lovely and compliment each other well. Excellent piece.

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