A languorous circle
slowly bringing delicate details
silken sunlight reveals fine gold
such inviting softness,
and barely touching breeze
finds us and rolls over
dimming space between
as thoughts rise to meet;
words move into the air
but mind cannot take them in
falling into calm sea deep blue,
rising tides
and flight of intentions
takes upon sunlight to darkness
and noon winds to still night air
when only pale moonlight covers desires;
gauzy glows adorn woman's form
in silver silence washing over us,
still never wishing to leave
shimmering stars of your gaze.
Author notes
expect to edit further
Prompt: Delicate in paler shades of surrender."
~Photo artist unknown at this time~
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A contest entry
- DELICATE....In Paler Shades Of Surrender***A Mature Theme Of Sensual Visions by Blue Rew.
821 points, ended January 18, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Lovely sight
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This is soft and vivid in tone and portrayal of color.
Delicate just like the prompt title and fit snugly to the visual of female form. Blue
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a very beautiful poem, this is delicate, and feels so spiritual without the mention of body parts..lovely poem. - aM
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serenely sensual and inviting!
You took me on a visionary voyage...
Perceptible, Poet.
~ Nicky♥
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Just a short remark now as I will point out what needs editing in order to have a chance at winning per the guidelines of this theme. No body parts...
"arms, hands and fingertips, lips, skin and eyes.
Enough said on that. "A languorous circle" starts it
in the right direction setting a slow and intimate pace...keep with that. Blue
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My word, what a delicate, sweeping write! Almost majestic, I couldn't help but feel tired, letting my mind roll where you wanted it - I actually felt the day pass.
Wonderful, wonderful work.
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Beautiful! Wow... day to night, sea deep to flight... this is an incredible description of an all encompassing love. Best of luck in the contest!
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