I would rather be on a bicycle.
wearing shorts from the men's department
and a wifebeater [size extra large boys]
flying down hills and losing my balance
down by the mississippi.
we stood in alleys next to theaters
and used fingers to shovel chinese food into our mouths
cause some cranky woman at the door
wouldn't let me in with styrofoam boxes.
my ears hurt afterward
though we tried to get ally to dance
and kissed julia on the cheek to inspire her
it didn't really work
and we ended up dancing together
the sun fell and we climbed into trees
took pictures of all the lights and sounds
felt spectacularly unpretty next to you, girl
but
that's not really all that new.
found my helmet under a bridge all
covered over with paint and cobwebs
lost my balance riding home by the big construction zone
and slept abnormally well.
Author notes
This poem is too literal. I don't like it.
S.K.A. played at the Varsity
and we wandered around Dinkytown all evening.
the photo I used:
http://photos-c.ak.facebook.com/photos-ak-sctm/v122/7/18/1284090081/n1284090081_30098310_8497.jpg
I am sort of pining for it to be warm out.
In a list
A contest entry
- My Last Contest on AP by ZachP.
800 points, ended March 10, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Sometimes, being too literal isn't a bad thing
a very nice write, thank you for sharing in this contest
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You might think it's too literal, but I think it's beautiful. I could picture everything perfectly in my mind's eye, like a movie. It's very modern and different and weird, and wonderful. Great job.
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literal or not; i find this poem to be modern and inspirational.
it had an element to it; like a sorta weird high. im not sure how to describe it but its a great feeling and i have to say this impressed me. i wish you the best of luck.
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