Flat ceiling six feet above me
It is grey in the dark
A round shadow hides from the window
Behind the bare light bulb
The clock glows red beside me
02:52
02:52
02:52
Am I really that bad?
Yes, you are
So? I got frustrated with my mother
You called her a lesbian whore
Like you havn't called you mother that
No, I havn't
Oh, that's bullshit
Only shitbags call their mothers names
You didn't even call your mother on her birthday
I forgot
Everybody forgets sometimes
Not like you, Brownstreak
03:04
03:04
03:04
How do I fix it?
You don't want to know
Yes, I do, now tell me, dammit!
You won't like it
You can't tell me what I will and will not like!
I just did
I know you better than you
Since when?
I live here, you smut
Just tell me
I need to fix it
No
I
I just can't take it anymore
Good
03:42
03:42
03:42
Ok, I think I'm ready
Do you now?
Yes
Are you going to pussy out like last time?
No, no, I promise
You sure?
Whew
Yes
Ok, do it again
Do it right this time
Yes, that's it, nice and deep
Like that?
Yes, now dip you finger in it
And start writing on the wall
Won't it be really hard for them to get it off?
Yes, that's the idea
We want it ingrained in their miserable memories
Yeah, that makes sense
Now write, "This is for all you pussbrains who never liked me
Who never gave me a chance
Live with this, bitches"
Ok, I'm dizzy now
That's good, very good
You're done, so now, just lay back down on the bed
Put your hands on that fat stomach of yours
And go to sleep.
04:13
04:13
04:13
Author notes
I picked Voice, because I am reading Silence of the Lambs, and I was struck by the fact that Hannible Lecter was able to talk an inmate into choking on his own tounge, and for some reason Voice jumped out at me. I took that basic concept From Silence of the Lambs and changed it to someone hearing a voice.
A contest entry
- Come and get your title... by Celticjedi.
600 points, ended January 19, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ...Suicide (cutting)... by xXsoulxcollectorXx.
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This was beautiful...as you know my view on death I find I like this a lot. Well done...
~Nova
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ooooOOOOOooooo...wow
im not even sure what to say..ive actually done that before...the whole written on the wall in my own blood...a suicide note...because i thought i was gonna end it that night...but then someone found me...and i didnt get to end it...so here i am...guess it wasnt my turn to die yet...but yeah..i REALLy can relate to and like this poem...
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I'm glad it didn't work.
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wooow
this is freakn awesome! sends chills down my spine! creepy, great write!
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Original, I like it! Sick an twisted, I like it even more! Friggen awesome! You are a great writer, and I love it even more the more I read!
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Wow.......undescribable. It's different. In a good way.Good job, hon! keep up the good werk. Have come clappies:
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Fuckin' A
This is absolutely brilliant.. I'm not kidding.
Not only did it have such brilliance, it was humorous in its own little sick way.
Bravo.
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The best poem ive ever read on here!
Great job.
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Wow that was awesome. I loved the way you made it kind of seem like the kid was possesed. Not sure if that was what you were going for but hey. Any who I really hope you win that contest. Good luck and keep up the great work!
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um,have you entered my contest more than once???
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Um. . . no, not that I can recollect.
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Wow. Very powerful and spine chilling. I like it!
I've never read or watched Silence of the Lambs because I can't handle horror movies, but the story from what I've heard, is brilliant, yet disturbing. Thank you for this creative and amazing write, keep it up and I wish you luck.
~Cj
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I was hoping it wouldn't be too dark or screwed up for you. I'm glad you like it!
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Hmmmmm.
Creepy.... I like the way you've put the time in, and how you used different text formatting to highlight the different voices
This works, and Voice is a great name for it!
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