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Crippled

I was crippled by your love
which taught me to mistrust
the pureness of my heart
I was cut off by the coldness
of your voice
which swished like sharp swords
through your eyes

then

I was caged by your loneliness
and your pain
which tainted your being
with darkened flesh and frowns

I could not leave ...

myra 2002

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Written February 2nd, 2002

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  • logorrhoea
    September 4, 2008
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    You confirm a strong point here. A solid write.


  • myrataal silver member
    June 7, 2002
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    Thank you, BlaZe and BitGit ...


  • BitGit silver member
    June 1, 2002
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    neutral

    I don't see this as sad. Contemplative yes, contemplative of sadness too indeed. But the 'I could not leave', speaks not of sadness but of hope compassion and love ...
    Edited by BitGit on right now because 'not neutral, but excellent'.

  • BitGit silver member
    February 12, 2002
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    Very strong, very deep - excellent work

  • BlaZe
    February 10, 2002
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    A good write, another powerful poem

  • myrataal silver member
    February 3, 2002
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    True. Thanks for visiting. God bless.


  • February 3, 2002
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    ar this is very sad. beautifully written though. i suppose we all get trapped at times.

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