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my work of art

I see you from across the patine floor.

Marbled with the most perfect illusion.

I can see my reflection making my way across the room.

 I look up at you, I cannot loose focus.

Straining almost, to see your blond  hair.

The paintings on the wall seem to spin.

I feel almost dizzy by the rush, You slowly walk past me,

I try not to make the obvious. I smell your skin from a distance.

"sweet aroma"

I cannot wait to slide my blade across it.

I silence my breathing as you stand next to me.

Eyes alluring,

not suspecting a thing.

Blue eyes gaze up at the portrait.

My eyes focused on you.

My work of art, How soon you will be my canvas.

Your footsteps Pound as you walk away.

Stiletto heels surface the marbled floor.

 

 

 

I follow you from afar, not to make myself seen.

The room is now crowded, but you are the only one I see.

Starving artist dance around the pastel colored sheets

Seep into each perfectly drawn work of art.

You pace the room,

My heart thumping, sweat rolling off my face.

As you make your way past the last group of paintings.

I follow behind like a dog in heat.

Twitching my fingers, waiting for the moment alone.

I have been studying you for weeks.

Each new craving built by the stacks.

My mouth becomes parched, my nerves eat at my soul.

This young art student just what I need to break desire.

You open the double doors

sliding your leather back pack onto your shoulder.

My heart weakens. My veins pulsating.

I touch the handle where your hand met.

I close my eyes imagining what is to come.

 

 

 

The moon surfaces down on the street

blocking the light from the alley.

I see you making your way around the building.

The crowd is getting smaller as the time ticks later.

This is it, you are all alone. digging through your purse.

I start to breathe harder

searching my pocket for the chloroform rag.

"Can I be of assistance" I ask you so suave ,  such a gentleman.

You look up at me,

teeth forming across your lips as you began to smile.

yes smile

for not long i will be removing each one of them pearly whites.

I walk up behind you, I can tell you are weary, you turn to speak.

I lash out at you grasping the handkerchief over your beautiful lips

You tumble down the car, I have to catch my breath.

 

 

 

Once you awake all you see is black.

Your body shaking, hyperventilating.

I walk pass your body, hands and feet strapped down.

I can see your head trembling from under the black cloth.

You my canvas nude and pure.

I look over on the table

covered with my choice of selective tools.

My brushes as you would have called them.

 

 

 

This room always brings back such sweet fantasy's

I used to dream about,

Locked away, until I unleashed them into reality.

The room so Dark, Rusty and bloody.

I pull the cloth off your beautiful face.

tears cover it as you scream out from behind the tape.

I take my hand and slide it across your skin,

leather glove tingles your cheeks forming chills up your arm.

I grab my first utensil,

a scalpel.

you see me handling the metal with care.

You start to moan out,

I move it closer touching the blade to your neck.

you close your eyes as the vein starts to twitch.

I push the blade in harder

your blue eyes open wide looking up in desperation.

I take it down your soft pale skin

watching the blood run slowly out of the wound,

you thank me with a shrill shriek.

 

 

 

My next attempt of this art piece

would be the magnificent wire cutters.

I spread them apart, then place them on your perfect fingers.

These hands have painted many beautiful pieces before.

You throw your head back

and yell out for you know what is in store.

I look at you and smile hastily,

clench down hard you almost come out of the chair.

your finger falls to the floor, followed by a gush of blood

"stop, please" you spit out at me.

I shush you and rub the back of your head.

 

 

 

Then I knew what would fill my canvas to the peak of beauty

you are becoming faint losing so much blood

still well aware as to what is happening next.

BUZZ goes the drill

you whilst yourself around trying to get away from it.

I touch it to your beautiful shaped face,

tearing through skin and bones.

you convulse

and the red of the blood mixes with blue eyes and blond hair.

such sweet destruction as you gulp in your last few breaths.

flames engulf as any evidence of this turns to ashes

 

 

 

 

There sets my beautifully structured canvas

Plastered in the chair with the blood slowly drying

And my hall of fame is now complete

I am proud of this beautiful work of art.

Author notes

i picked option 3 serial killer...and i am in night terrors group

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  • xXbleedingscarsXx
    September 23
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    this freaked me out...but very descriptive...

    ~x~shadow~x~@

  • Wow. This is gory, but more erotic to me. I think you did a good job, but it doesn't really quench my gore cravings. Thanks for entering, and good luck. ((:


  • Jazzlyn
    June 12
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    holy *bunny*! this is awesome!! definate finalist

  • Wow. Every drop of blood was horrifyingly clear, every shining blade, every scream in desperation. It was amazing. The details, every one of them vivid. The thoughts of the character's mind as he ripped through her skin, the neatness of the blood. It was all amazing.
    I couldn't add anything if I even tried, the blood was spilled to complete perfection.
    Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest! ♥


  • SecretPsychology
    December 8, 2008
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    Wow.....just WOW! I....I'm speechless.....WOW! good luck!


  • breedluv gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    A little too graphic for my tastes; I would have preferred more 'why', and less "how' and 'what'. But it was an interesting read, and thanks for entering.


  • HereComesTheSun
    September 10, 2008
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    wow so intense and so true its a harsh fact of life and a an amazing write
    a finalist great job


  • SpiritDarkmaiden
    June 16, 2008

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    Wow, a beautiful work of art. I'm not sure what else to say...it was insanely insane, and I loved it. All the blood and such...very gory. Thanks for entering such a scary piece.

    Bloody wishes


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    June 13, 2008

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    This is great...it's exactly what I hoped for and very suspenseful..

    Thanks for entering my challenge and good luck.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • KateMadness
    June 11, 2008
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    O_O

    Oh wow...
    You are a genius, my dear. I love your poem, the description, the depth...oh the blood and cuts. I love the storyline; an art student, going to be used for your next piece of art? Something I would never even begin to dream, but art is a hobby and combine it with killing.. :]
    Truly a great piece. Good luck to you.
    And thanks for the 'Sweet Dream'.


  • ArchOblivion
    March 18, 2008
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    Awesome entry hauntingly chilling and a great read and congrats as well to the trophy! =)


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    February 22, 2008
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    OMG

    WOW!
    THIS IS AMAZING!
    The section of this poem with the scalpel actually struck me as romantic,
    A VERY HOT WRITE!
    It's twisted, gruesome, chilling and very suspenceful, you're a very talented writer.
    thanks for your entry and kudos on the write


  • Dak
    January 23, 2008
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    Wow, very sick and sadistic, I loved it. The art metaphor you kept referring to was a very nice touch, and I loved all the suspense you built up, it just made the poem even better. You really got into the mind of the killer, it flowed smoothly like a story, yet choppy like his excitement. Thank you so much for entering this into my contest.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 22, 2008

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    Wow this is intense! Laced with evil darkness. Just what the doctor ordered A fine piece of art (pun intended) The imagery is truly disturbing and macabre. The only thing I would say is the beginning was a little long, the suspense and build up were awesome but I would have liked to have seen a little less of that and a little more torture. Of course that is purely my own taste, and whacked out mind Keep the pen handy....you may well need it. Thank you for this wonderful entry and best of luck in my contest


    • completely mad
      January 22, 2008
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      why thank you...and next time i will try to keep the suspense at a minimum hehe..


  • Timespell
    January 16, 2008

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    Work Of Art!

    Hehehe...
    Great stuff, you have definitely got the Psychopaths evil intentions down to a "T"

    I think this is your best piece of writing by a mile and can tell you have taken a lot of time to get into character for it... And you have left a gateway for more writes on this character.

    Good luck in the competition,
    I think I'll be seeing you in the next round!

    All the best,

    ~T.S~

    • completely mad
      January 16, 2008

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      hehe thanks...it was alot of fun writing this..I tried to imagine the most gruesome torture..and it worked quite well...

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