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God Whispers

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The silence that weighs
down on my soul
when winter's gift of snow,
blankets the land
is deafening in its purity.

Amidst the stillness
God whispers
and serenity is born.

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  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    June 11

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    Hoodwinked !

    I like the mix of nature, emotions and spitituality in this thoughtful poem. Your words are so meaningful to me as I too feel the silent weight and oppression of of the severe winters, it is a time of contemplation and search for meaning and purpose of such periods. Well written poem, thanks for sharing.

    You have been Hoodwinked today by the Poetic Bandits because WE CARE!

    Dennis


  • chilali
    October 28, 2008
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    Beautiful short write! Thank you so much for sharing and good luck in the contest!. Please mention the line"the itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout" in your AN. If you've read the contest page, you'll know why I want it there! Thank you once agian!


  • Lislaine
    October 15, 2008
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    NICE i like it goodluck

  • piccola silver member
    August 8, 2008

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    Amidst the stillness
    God whispers ... what a beautiful line and how true it is too. Snow always brings silence with it. Maybe it muffles sound but whatever it is a strange stillness and the write captures it beautifully.

  • Judith Chandler
    July 15, 2008

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    A simple short write but well worded. It had an effect on me. Nice piece.

    Congratulations on your trophy.


  • daviscth silver member
    July 2, 2008

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    I fell in love with the last two lines. This is such a wonderful short piece. Thanks for posting it in my contest.


  • Frogzter gold member
    June 20, 2008
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    When God whispers to the soul, indeed serenity is born.

    Thanks once again.

    Frogz~


  • Pollycheck
    May 16, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my short poems contest. i really like the line:
    Is deafening in its purity
    It is an unusual use of words.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    April 1, 2008

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    I wouldn't capitalize every line in this. But the poem itself if very lovely, the wording is good and I wouldn't change that. It is a good piece


  • B Chandler
    March 20, 2008

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    Commenty/Opinion

    Keep in mind that whenever you are showing a form of possession, 's is needed. WINTER'S

    Keep penning


  • Tarja
    January 23, 2008

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    Thank you for entering, I'm not all that sure how this ties into this specific option, but alright. I found this to be very deep and very beautiful. I enjoyed it a lot. Thank you for entering and good luck.

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