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Beyond This Road

Beyond this road
There's nothing there
A life in a life
That never was here
But the more we look
The more we see
That life is just an unwritten book
For as I walk
Down this road
I see nothing beyond
Yet I see everything behind
Looking ahead
Into the unknown
Fathers
Mothers
Daughters
Sons
No ones eyes are the same
Yet No one knows
What lies beyond this road.

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  • Forgotten Lilith
    4 hours ago
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    I like it. The message was concise. Thanks for entering. Best wishes.


  • Frodofan silver member
    January 31, 2008
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    Just running through once more before the final decision. Thanks again for entering.

  • ea silver member
    January 25, 2008

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    I actually like this kind of free verse rhyming. I think this is a meaningful poem... it gives a mellow feeling as a walk down this road might.

  • Frodofan silver member
    January 16, 2008

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    Interesting. Slightly awkward rhythm and rhyme was. It was rough in that, where you would expect a rhyme there wasn't one and then one would suddenly pop up. I like the concept, but think you could tweak it. Thanks for entering.