I dont know what I am going to do
Everything seems so far away
Life was turned upside down
I love him so much
I will do anything for him
I want to see him but dont know how
The world is dark without him
I cant get him off my mind
He is miles away but close in my heart
I want to see him
feel his warmth
but all my hope burn away
burned with the house and made him farther away.
Author notes
Sami
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Simple but stunning - your language brings out the emotions within this piece. Nicely done.
Thanks for entering,
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This is a sad, but sweet love poem. I think everyone can relate to this at some point and time in their life. You might want to check your spelling here, I can see one or two simple errors. Also, try to stay away from the cliches, it weakens the emotion of your writing.
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