Falling, Falling, landing
on soft grass of Paradise.
My eyes seem cloudy
so i start to cry
wet filled tears fill my eyes
and clear them from the hate.
Finally I caught a glimpse
of what not could be found.
A place of serenity and a
harmonious sound.
Can it really be, is it finally
found?
Walking into the sun without
a single sound.
Stumbling over so much love
that had been put down
a place i need to set me free.
I'm speechless as i sit down
on the waving grass and stare
at what I had found.
Jumping up from an alarming sound
I wake up to see only light
from a windsill.
I than realized with tears in my eyes
that i had found Paradise, love and peace
only in a sweet-filled dream.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired 2 by jasminerose.
700 points, ended February 10, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I just wrote it in like 5 minutes during class of what i saw in the picture. a peaceful Paradise.
Comments
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creates a nice mood here, the beauty and peaceful nature of an experience...dreams become hopes...very nice...PK
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Nice take on the picture, your poem brought to mind the 23 psalm. Like after walking through the shadow of death, the narrator finally finds peace.
Nice work.
Marianne
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This is really beautiful I did notice some I's that need to be capitial and you may want to capitilize God , but this is a realy beautiful write.
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Beautifully expressed imagery along with an inviting peaceful feel!
Serenity at its best!
I think we all need a place like this to dream about!!
A very lovely entry for my contest!
Thank you so very much for entering!!
Jasminerose
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well done with thoughtfulness and feelings. to have suchaa dream would indeed be a paradise, that i would love to be ther. thanks for sharing, success in the contest.
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