secret looks
secret words
secret love
a love that shouldn't be
a love that couldn't be
but is
a love unknown
yet obvious
to you and me
notes left in the morning
letters left at night
somehow we've made this work
a secret love
that shouldn't be
that couldn't be
but is
Author notes
this is for a person who i shouldnt love, but for some reason do...with everyrthing i am.(this is choice nomber one!)
my name is love is pain92
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"a love that shouldn't be
a love that couldn't be
but is"
Reminds me of my love, but it's not that it shouldn't or couldn't be... It is love, and no one can tell you otherwise.
This is beautiful in every aspect. Lovely write.... Warmed my heart.
Thanks for sharing & entering your write in A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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Thanks for entering! You have amazing talent. Though, this particular piece is a tad repative and needs a little work on the grammar.
"A secret love
That shouldn't be
That couldn't be,
But is -
Very simple and interesting - you have penned this with simple but strong emotions.
Thanks for entering,
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thats very interesting
best of luck!
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I fell you in this. I have my fiance and love him dearly but i love this girl and she is so wonderful. Not so much secret to my man but to the world it is. Great write and thank you for following the rules. Goodluck in the contest dear, and good luck with your love,
Stephanie -
This seems very sad. The wording you
chose portrays a deep sadness and also
a powerful stand taken for this love.
good job. -
This is really sweet and touching,liked it a lot.
"notes left in the morning
letters left at night
somehow we've made this work
a secret love
that shouldn't be
that couldn't be
but is "
It happens more often than you think. -
really good
i really like this peom. its greatly put. i have a wall of poetry in my room... and yours is going on it.. great job ( and just to let you know, i am really picky about poems)
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