If I could just forget what I forgive
I'd never have to hate your for your sins
And I would seldom find it hard to live
When fear tormented by anguish begins
But I am not a simple man naive
Ignoring every blade stabbed through my hope
Instead I struggle now just to believe
That through this tortured heartache I can cope
When night time comes I realise my fears:
The memories of all you put me through
And every night time lingers over years
So many years of solace over-due
Through all such tainted woe I needn't breathe
For I am not a living breathing man
And no body could see me die bereaved
I know that now I've died by your command
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The last line packs a bunch. Your rhyme was near perfect but I did have difficulty making sense out of some sentences as they felt like you purposely put some words in different places for it to rhyme. ANd now I don't know if I make sense
Never ♥
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I think everyone pretty much summed up the poem... great write... and I'm sorry you had to go through this kind of pain...
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damn, this is an extremely deep poem. I love it, you're an amazing writer. & i miss talking to you ! -
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oh hello! Haven't heard from you for a long time! how are you, friend?
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How sad this is...and must be hard to go through..but how much words I write here in my comment...nothing would really change for you...except that you just breathe on my friend...there is no other way than just breathe on....
And write on so I can read
XXJeannette
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very sad
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wow.....the pain you write of tugs on my heart strings. I've had that feeling. I know exactly what you speak of. I hope you can gather your strength and turn it in to the will to carry on. Absolutly wonderful write!
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