You cannot be my Valentine,
because I've found another;
a dark, enchanting substitute
who's proved a better lover.
One who does not sleep around,
or ply me with excuses--
for satisfaction guaranteed,
chocolate has its uses.
And as for you, you're history, gal;
chocolate now is my best pal!
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest. by penman.
575 points, ended January 16, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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yuk i hate chocolate lol... think i must be the only female in the world that does... but i cant stand sweet things. so now you know what NOT to send me for valentines day lol. seriously... a great piece
hugs,
georgie,
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This reminds me of one I wrote on the same subject, choc is my true love also and never lets you down as you so rightly say in this fun poem. Congrats on getting hon mention.
Ann
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Wonderful
Very well done. best of luck in the contest.
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Chocolate...yummy
Hello Bill,
I hope you are doing well today. I have just finished reading your entry, and wish to tell you just how much I have enjoyed the read. It was an excellent take on the phrase for the contest.I love this piece,you have penned and the message you have brought for us to read.
Powerful images with emotions that tug hard.Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Voice with us ~
Take care my friend.
~whispers~
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Chocolate certainly does have its uses and it is healthier than some lovers, certainly healthier than a bag of chips.
Cheers. Seriously, I really like the humorous tone of this write, especially the last two lines. Kind of flip and funny.
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Kudos! This just tickled me pink. Long live chocolate!!
Wolfie -
lol...very nice rhyme, wording and is creative, too.
best wishes in your contest.
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