When I was a child
A few years ago,
I questioned everything,
I had such a thirst to know
The when's and the where's
The who's and the how's
I still don't know the answer
But I'm not so bothered now.
Like on this walk today
Where I've never been before,
I take in all the sights
But I do not wish for more
You see, I like discovery
And not to know it all,
What's left if one's omniscient--
Naught to learn nor recall.
So each day's an adventure
Of new things along the way,
New sights and scents and venues
To delight with display
Oh sure, there's many old things
That give stability
But each day is a conquest
Of what new things I'll see.
My senses are awakened
And all the boredom's gone,
So life just keeps unfolding
Until my life is done.
I'll tread new paths I'm given
And find all the joys within,
Looking ahead with each new day,
And not just to where I've been.
Author notes
Poem ammended per suggestions.
A contest entry
- Beyond This Road... Picture Inspired by Frodofan.
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Just running through once before judging. I don't know if you had a background color up when I first went through or not, but it makes the picture so very vivid!
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Very beautiful, simply but stunning. You definitely took a nice approach and let it go with small but sure bangs
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I like the direction and flow that this poem takes. Adventurous but cautious, it seems to be balanced in reality, not the imaginary or overly idyllic. This poem has a ring of honesty and the comfort of an old friend. Well Done!
Dennis
P.S. I think the words on the first line a few years ago should be move and made your second line , giving all stanzas 8 line each.
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Thank You, Brother
Thank you for all you kind words, and eagle eyes to see what should have been so obvious to me--but for some reason it wasn't.
Thank You for your encouragement. I'm glad your back on line once again.
God Bless You,
David
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Very nice. It's true there is so much to explore. It's much more fun to experience new things than old things. Exploring new things keeps you young also. So keep it up eh? lol.
Anna.
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Thank you Anna, for stopping by and sharing your wise observations as you reflect on the poem and life itself.
I enjoyed writing it and it has become one of my wife's favorites.
God Bless You, Dear Friend,
David
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Nice Work
Quite a beautiful tale like poem of how an every day simple walk with nature around your area and beyond can turn into such a picturesque poem. I really enjoyed where you took us too with this poem and the picture you added as well. very well rounded and nice work. keep it up and good luck with the contest.
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This is very beautiful the flow is great I really like this poem it gives me some inspiration ideas
Redwing Spirit
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"But I don't wish for more"
^ I thought if you had "do not" instead of "don't" it might have a better rhythm.
"e'en"
^ Seemed a little awkward and out of place, since you didn't really do that anywhere else. Doesn't seem to fit the tone of the rest of the piece. But I think you could easily re-work that one part.
An enjoyable piece. Made me think of walking or hiking on a warm day and all the sights there are. And this could easily be the meditation of such a walk.
Thanks for entering.
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