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Chaotic Hate

Memories and mysteries,
Of my unreturned embrace,
Causes of my malice,
And your total lack of faith.
Tell me now that you've hurt me so
With a smile on your face,
Was it worth betraying our lives,
To hurt me the way you did?

(Chorus)
You have now lost all my trust,
along with its warmth,
I cannot believe
I let this chaos occur,
You have disgraced me,
with no room for forgiveness,
I knew we should have never been,
more than what we were. (end)

I see the very being,
I most brutally hate,
Staring back into my tearful eyes
of melancholy ice.
Do not devise your apologies to me,
cause it's far too late.
Share with me,
why you ever desired me anyway

(Chorus)

Thanks to your
selfish intentions of deception,
I feel as though i
can never love again,
flinching at every first sign
of adoring affection.
I gaze into the shattered windows all around me
only to see,
That the one i savagely despise,
is nothing but my own reflection!

Author notes

If you want to hear How i want to song to sound like ( with better vocals and alittle more work done to it) follow the link www.myspace.com/mow89

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Comments

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  • upperworld06
    March 23

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    yeah i wanna hear it, i have to wait til i get to the library though, too much blocking at school. thanks for entering


  • katie-jo
    June 30, 2008

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    this is very depressing but the message you put out there was great. it was simply put and i liked that.

    thanks for entering and all the best in the contest.


  • Redrusty66
    March 20, 2008

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    Great write, powerful emotional impact, Construction was excellent as was the use of vocabulary and wordplay to get across the message. Loved the ending, the last line said it all. Great work!


  • N e a r
    March 6, 2008

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    The ending was unexpected... This song is raw yet truthful in its nature. Songs express a lot, if they are done tastefully, that is... This is a good example of a well written one. Thanks for entering.


  • nobody knows me
    February 23, 2008
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    Thankyou for entering my contest good luck x


  • DestiniesTwined
    February 20, 2008
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    This is a good poem. Thanks for entering. Good luck.


  • islekine gold member
    February 17, 2008
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    Very well penned..

    Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on!
    *PEACE*

  • kales4
    February 6, 2008

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    Thank youfor entering my contest. I know how it feels to feel like love it tainted after that first horrible experience. Good Luck

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