I rarely sleep in any clothing
[Men's clothing that is]...
Fact is, I love a nice silk nightie...
It makes me feel pretty and desirable...
Can you visualise my beauty...
Six foot eight inches of gorgeous me
[And the eight inches is my cock gristle,
Needless to say, harder than Ayer's Rock]...
Waiting for my dear slavering lady wife
In her shining suit of piss-stained armour...
Can you have a vision of this moment of mine...
And then she squats heavily on my face...
The stench of her pubis is exquisite...
Let me die of joy now, please, Oh God.
A contest entry
- GROTESQUE SEX by Edna Sweetlove.
450 points, ended June 7, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I wasnt expecting this. What was I expecting... I dont know. I enjoyed it. unexpected and random
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Fucking exquisite. I think that's what you said. You really are a total arsehole. I think you may win here.
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Great imagery in this write - I'm lost in the /shining suit of piss-stained armour/ and the final line is the call of all religious mystics at the moment of illumination - you're in great company with this poem!
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all righty then
It's a shame you can't say what you feel!!1 lol This must have been one heck of a dream, sounds like more of a nightmare to me! But, a good piece, pardon the pun!
keep on penning
POETDONTKNOWIT -
Oh wow.
Not at all what I expected. It leaves me to wonder how much of it is true, and how much is fabricated. Regardless, my favourite lines are the two in brackets -
[Men's clothing that is]...
[And the eight inches is my cock gristle,
Needless to say, harder than Ayer's Rock]...
Haha. Yes, I'm a shameless female
So sue me. Great write!
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this one is........................
interesting!
very erotic piece here...
keep on penning
mike, aka jonathan wikkins -
hehe.. this made me giggle... even a little bit of an embarrased school girl giggle!!! it's very whitty, very powerful. very vivid and very filthy gorgous!!
great write thanks for sharing!!
xxannaxxx
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Wow interesting and funny too
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wow, this is hilarious. I thought it would be another eroticc piece when I clicked on it, but this is great. You certainly have a wonderful way with words.
Good luck in the contest it's entered in. Hope you can get SOMEONES attention with this. lol
Keep Writing!
Blessed Be!
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And then she squats heavily on my face...
The stench of her pubis is exquisite...
Let me die of joy now, please, Oh God.
Well you grabbed the prompt..so strongly..well done..
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This isn't exactly what I was looking for in the contest. I'm asking for more about you as a whole person, not just one night of fucking. Great write, but unfortunately it is wrong for this contest. I'm sorry but I have to remove it.
♥
whisper
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"Let me die of joy now, please, Oh God."
LOL, I love this line. It may not be intended for humor, but I found it a little cute.
You took an interesting approach to this contest. Okay, I know it's not a free write, but it's still interesting.
I don't know what else to say to this. Lol
Good luck in the contest.
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What a lovely dream, and so yummy that you remembered it all! Everyone should be so lucky! "Cock gristle" will now be my words of the day.
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