Faults to spill
All are mine
Filling your head
Pushing in time
Breaking my heart
Feelings depressed
Unwanted, discarded
I'm filth, don't digest
Rubbish to find
Comparing to me
Lower am I
Maggots won't eat
Trembling now
Can't get away
Screaming my torments
Grotesque is thy name
Putrid, self hatred
Inflicted my wounds
Crying or whining
There's no end too soon
Suffering and pleading
My heart in your hand
Torture infesting
Blood rushing, demands
Pathetic I lay there
To grin what I see
Loaded to blow it
Trigger smiles at me
Stretching for endings
Grabbing last breathes
Pulling, no thoughts though
Life ending a mess.
Author notes
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luna-midnight
A contest entry
- Anything goes by Angel Of Heaven99.
345 points, ended March 7, 2008, 45 entries
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Honorable mention
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'Maggots won't eat' reminds me of something, which is good.
Another good ending. I like the 'no thoughts though' because that's usually how it is.
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wowow
and so you should win! well done what a massive impact your poem has, I can relate to this at the moment my partner makes me feel like that. Thank for sharing your great poem I wish you all the luck for the contest your work deserves it your a talented writer
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wow. u def made me feel your emotions. i love it.
i dont have any points left do applaud but 2 applauds for u -
Sadly I can realate to this it is hard to deal with and even harder for people to understand thanks for sharing be well
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"Grotesque is thy name"
I am absolutely in love with that line. The whole poem is so well written, and the flow is so flawless it's just, amazing! This is really amazing... Thanks for entering! -
Yes, it would be a mess. Don't know what else to say about it. It really is awful when someone gets to that place.
It's wellexpressed and certainly evokes emotion.
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There's no end too soon
Suffering and pleading
My heart in your hand
Torture infesting
Blood rushing, demands
Oh, so deep expression in nicest of word choice. Beautiful.
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Awww, honey, this is so sad you know. Hey these feelings are all what you are going through now. You are struggling with yourself in a big way. This is such a deep, emotional piece of writing. Wonderful work though.
Wayne Leon
xx
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