Ornament of love
I was there with you in mind
After we talked, looking at the moon
The dark deep blue skies
Seem to dance to a lover’s tune
Ornaments of love is what I saw
Twinkling raindrops in the trees
A mirror to the heavens
Reflecting stars upon the leaves
I was watching, staring, wondering
When next we’d be together
My mind it was in the distance
In the faraway land of forever
My heart to you it lingered
As I stood there in the night
Thunder had came and went
Lightening was out of sight
Thoughts of you brought me calm
It helped me to unwind
Your voice came to me on the wind
Soothing my troubled mind
No moon out there for me to see
Only your face from up above
Smiling from the swirling clouds
It was an ornament of love
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Please tell me what you think
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I like the use of imagery in this write very much s
Thank you for sharing
Write on
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deep
I felt the words in this piece. Love can be a funny thing, but when you share love with another, any form, it seems to fill the soul. Sure pain may come at times, but to me it can all be worth it if it is true love. The love for a child or a lover, a best friend, it all can take us places we never thought we would be.
Take Care,
doubleD
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And what a wonderful Ornament it is through your words,
something to keep and display for life
Thanks for sharing,
Love and Light
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A sweet and tangy expression of love that holds the mind. "Thunder came and went" is poor English and could be improved with thought.
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This was not bad at all... I really enjoyed the creative ideas you expressed in this... it was not like anything I have read before... the flow was steady and smooth... and all but one of the rhyming pairs were lovely... I really do not like "love" and "above". It just is... overused and not very original. But that's just me... other than that, very nice.
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